We're almost there, Hoth! I really appreciate you taking the time to fit this all into our lore properly! While your mentions of the pact war are excellent, the Pact was still a nearly unstoppable force. As such, they likely would have, at the very least, attacked the village your character lived in directly, if not completely destroyed it. Being a small village far to the east, they might not have focused their main armies that way, but the town would definitely see some direct combat. Incorporate that into your backstory as you wish! If you need some help with ideas, please PM me! I'm happy to help!
Everything seems fine, apart from your character biography. You've made no mention of the pact war and how it affected your character's upbringing. Please take a look at some other examples of accepted applications, and edit accordingly!
First, your character is too tall, for a dark elf. Their height ranges from 5 foot to 6 foot.
Second, and this is just more of a clarification, since I was unsure by the wording, I should mention that the pact didn't really just pass past a place and leave it ravaged. They pushed everyone to Barkamsted, killing whoever couldn't get away in time. Your character's backstory seems like it could easily fit into Barkamsted, and maybe that's how you meant it, I just wasn't sure with your phrase of "No the armies of orcs had long since past indeed, leaving nothing but ruined farm land and smouldering earth in their wake,"
So one couldn't really live behind the pact lines. At least, not in any semblance of a civilization, such as a town or village.
I'd also like to apologize for this taking so long! Things have been crazy hectic for me, but I'm on summer break now, so I'll be able to check these forums much more often!
While you have done excellent work with the edits based on Canish's suggestions, your character's occupation still describes them as an expert in the crafts you're describing. At least, that's how I interpret it. Characters cannot start as experts in their feilds, but instead as having some beginner experience, which is then built upon in character and on server. Please adjust it accordingly so your character isn't described as so proficient in a wide array of metalworking procedures, and we should be set!
Just a few things, and we'll be set here!
First, I'd like you to go into more detail on how the pact war affected the character's upbringing. Keep in mind that it was a massive event, and caused people to have to flee to Barkamsted. So, your character wouldn't be able to stay in a small town or village. I'm not sure if that was the case, but your wording didn't make it clear.
But how did living in a overcrowded city, soon to be attacked, affect the family? How did it affect your character's earlier years?
second, while your definition on Powergaming has one of the elements, you're still missing one important point on what powergaming includes. Please look at previous examples from other applications to see what needs to be added!
Thanks for your interest in the server, I look forward to seeing you playing with us soon!
1.) The pact war ended 5 years ago, just for reference. The way your opening sentences were worded, I got the feeling you were setting up your character to be born in the last few years of the pact war, where she'd be more born 12 years before the end, at this point.
2.) The pact was a massive war machine, which easily pushed the alliance back to Barkamsted. While tiny groups of people did manage to survive behind their lines, it was not without immense risk and loss of life. A large caravan would easily be detected and destroyed living behind the lines. They could easily have their lifestyle near Barkamsted, though!
3.) While travelling merchants/caravans are definitely a thing, the concept of a culture of romani around such a lifestyle doesn't exist in Saphriel. By that name, at least.
4.) There's no magic that specifically brings the dead back to life. While necromancy does exist, it is immensely complex and requires extreme levels of magical capabilities. The aspects a character may start with are listed on our magic page.
I can tell you've taken a bunch of time to read our lore and create this story, I really appreciate the effort you've gone through here! Hope to see you on soon!
Hey there, Carter! Loving this character, I'm happy to see more people playing goblins!
Just a few things before we can accept this, though.
1.) Your character's height isn't realistic, given their race. As our website says, "The average Goblin stands approximately four feet tall. No outlying cases observed." Please adjust accordingly.
2.) Your character biography doesn't include any of our lore. The pact war was a massive event, and there wasn't really an environment for mafias to form in the pact races, as they were largely focused on war with the alliance, and as such didn't have massive cities that might be burned down.
3.) Your magic application needs to be reworked. The magic biography will naturally have to be adjusted to fit with out lore and the timeline, as it links to the character biography. Your explanations of the limitations of magic need to be clearer, so please re-read our magic system. Finally, characters can only start with the magical aspects that are mentioned on the magic page. An aspect of anti-magic does not exist.
Simply put, your responses to the questions need to have the lengths required because they are just that: Required. We can't go allowing people shorter responses for certain portions, or longer ones, based on subjective notions such as the simplicity of a character. There's plenty that could be written about a farmer. At the very least, one can certainly manage a handful of paragraphs.
As for the years, it has been about 5 years since the end of the pact war!
Sorry for the slow response, this has been a crazy week for me!
You need to incorporate your backstory more into the server's lore. It's clear to me that this is simply the kind of story one can copy paste into any application for any server. Please re-read our lore and elaborate on how the pact war would affect your character. Furthermore, your short rp responses are much too short. They need to be paragraphs, not sentences!
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Accepted!
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Texture Pack: http://resourcepack.net/conquest-resource-pack/[/b]
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We're almost there, Hoth! I really appreciate you taking the time to fit this all into our lore properly! While your mentions of the pact war are excellent, the Pact was still a nearly unstoppable force. As such, they likely would have, at the very least, attacked the village your character lived in directly, if not completely destroyed it. Being a small village far to the east, they might not have focused their main armies that way, but the town would definitely see some direct combat. Incorporate that into your backstory as you wish! If you need some help with ideas, please PM me! I'm happy to help!
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Everything seems fine, apart from your character biography. You've made no mention of the pact war and how it affected your character's upbringing. Please take a look at some other examples of accepted applications, and edit accordingly!
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Accepted!
Server IP: s21.minespan.com:26802
Texture Pack: http://resourcepack.net/conquest-resource-pack/
Website: http://therealmofsaphriel.enjin.com/home
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Just two things, and we'll be set!
First, your character is too tall, for a dark elf. Their height ranges from 5 foot to 6 foot.
Second, and this is just more of a clarification, since I was unsure by the wording, I should mention that the pact didn't really just pass past a place and leave it ravaged. They pushed everyone to Barkamsted, killing whoever couldn't get away in time. Your character's backstory seems like it could easily fit into Barkamsted, and maybe that's how you meant it, I just wasn't sure with your phrase of "No the armies of orcs had long since past indeed, leaving nothing but ruined farm land and smouldering earth in their wake,"
So one couldn't really live behind the pact lines. At least, not in any semblance of a civilization, such as a town or village.
I'd also like to apologize for this taking so long! Things have been crazy hectic for me, but I'm on summer break now, so I'll be able to check these forums much more often!
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Accepted
We've spoken in Private Messages, and I'm happy to see that you fully understand how progression of knowledge and skills works on our server!
Server IP:[/b] s21.minespan.com:26802
Texture Pack:[/b] http://resourcepack.net/conquest-resource-pack/
Website:[/b] http://therealmofsaphriel.enjin.com/home
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Accepted!
Server IP: s21.minespan.com:26802
Texture Pack: http://resourcepack.net/conquest-resource-pack/
Website: http://therealmofsaphriel.enjin.com/home
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While you have done excellent work with the edits based on Canish's suggestions, your character's occupation still describes them as an expert in the crafts you're describing. At least, that's how I interpret it. Characters cannot start as experts in their feilds, but instead as having some beginner experience, which is then built upon in character and on server. Please adjust it accordingly so your character isn't described as so proficient in a wide array of metalworking procedures, and we should be set!
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Just a few things, and we'll be set here!
First, I'd like you to go into more detail on how the pact war affected the character's upbringing. Keep in mind that it was a massive event, and caused people to have to flee to Barkamsted. So, your character wouldn't be able to stay in a small town or village. I'm not sure if that was the case, but your wording didn't make it clear.
But how did living in a overcrowded city, soon to be attacked, affect the family? How did it affect your character's earlier years?
second, while your definition on Powergaming has one of the elements, you're still missing one important point on what powergaming includes. Please look at previous examples from other applications to see what needs to be added!
Thanks for your interest in the server, I look forward to seeing you playing with us soon!
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1.) The pact war ended 5 years ago, just for reference. The way your opening sentences were worded, I got the feeling you were setting up your character to be born in the last few years of the pact war, where she'd be more born 12 years before the end, at this point.
2.) The pact was a massive war machine, which easily pushed the alliance back to Barkamsted. While tiny groups of people did manage to survive behind their lines, it was not without immense risk and loss of life. A large caravan would easily be detected and destroyed living behind the lines. They could easily have their lifestyle near Barkamsted, though!
3.) While travelling merchants/caravans are definitely a thing, the concept of a culture of romani around such a lifestyle doesn't exist in Saphriel. By that name, at least.
4.) There's no magic that specifically brings the dead back to life. While necromancy does exist, it is immensely complex and requires extreme levels of magical capabilities. The aspects a character may start with are listed on our magic page.
I can tell you've taken a bunch of time to read our lore and create this story, I really appreciate the effort you've gone through here! Hope to see you on soon!
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Hey there, Carter! Loving this character, I'm happy to see more people playing goblins!
Just a few things before we can accept this, though.
1.) Your character's height isn't realistic, given their race. As our website says, "The average Goblin stands approximately four feet tall. No outlying cases observed." Please adjust accordingly.
2.) Your character biography doesn't include any of our lore. The pact war was a massive event, and there wasn't really an environment for mafias to form in the pact races, as they were largely focused on war with the alliance, and as such didn't have massive cities that might be burned down.
3.) Your magic application needs to be reworked. The magic biography will naturally have to be adjusted to fit with out lore and the timeline, as it links to the character biography. Your explanations of the limitations of magic need to be clearer, so please re-read our magic system. Finally, characters can only start with the magical aspects that are mentioned on the magic page. An aspect of anti-magic does not exist.
I'm looking forward to seeing you on the server!
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Simply put, your responses to the questions need to have the lengths required because they are just that: Required. We can't go allowing people shorter responses for certain portions, or longer ones, based on subjective notions such as the simplicity of a character. There's plenty that could be written about a farmer. At the very least, one can certainly manage a handful of paragraphs.
As for the years, it has been about 5 years since the end of the pact war!
Sorry for the slow response, this has been a crazy week for me!
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misspost, sorry!
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You need to incorporate your backstory more into the server's lore. It's clear to me that this is simply the kind of story one can copy paste into any application for any server. Please re-read our lore and elaborate on how the pact war would affect your character. Furthermore, your short rp responses are much too short. They need to be paragraphs, not sentences!
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Accepted!!
Sorry it took so long!
IP: s21.minespan.com:26802
Welcome to the server!