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    posted a message on Fallout: Scorched Sands | Serious Roleplay | Building Phase
    Quote from spawnfan55»



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    Hey there Spawn, I worked with Benn on this and we've a few things we want to address.

    -Concerning the backstory of the character, overall the concept of it is perfectly fine. We were a bit disappointed to see that the tribe the character was from wasn’t named. But we liked the concept of it, though we believe a few things worthy of change would be how the inhabitants of this tribe became generally larger and stronger than most normal people; as saying it was because of a, “harsh upbringing” doesn’t entirely explain much of anything. Instead we feel it would be better if it was because of incest, radiation, cannibalism, or a combination of these things.

    As well as the unnecessary harshness of his childhood. While perfectly fine to have a character who was beaten by his parents or had some sort of rough upbringing, we feel it better if there was some sort of explanation as to ‘why’ this happened. Rather than just having a rough upbringing simply because it makes him more ‘deep’.

    -His high pain tolerance "flaw" is hardly a flaw at all, your example of his pain tolerance worries me as it implies he's so resilient to pain that he would not notice an arrow in his back, which is simply unrealistic and overpowered.

    -Requested equipment and character's current status in Coahuiltecan; in the final paragraph of of your backstory you state that he is slightly more than a slave, has he earned their trust as a warrior(implied by his weaponry) in only a few years, how did he rise among the other slaves with a quick temper and hate for his captors(who aren't really in desperate need for better warriors)? I appreciate the attempt at diversity, but if you want him to be a slave turned warrior you should rethink how you play this character, his personality and explain in his backstory how he worked his way up, however I strongly recommend you just start as a slave, get a feel for how the character works before deciding how he acts, this will also be much easier to explain in backstory

    -We've tried to hold back on nitpicking at things that don't necessarily need to be addressed, but the following is noteworthy:
    His hatred for the Coahuiltecan and plan to work his way up the ranks either for a chance at revenge or just to survive conflict with his personality "tends to get ticked off easily and/or prefers a more brawn over brains" "doesn't aspire to any sort of greater goal" "tendency to lash out at others who tick him off in any sort of matter" looking past the personality conflict, if I focus on his personality he seems like a recipe for disaster as a Coahuiltecan slave, however you seem to describe him being beaten into obedience. I feel like when you wrote his personality you weren't describing his current state, does he obey them while hating them and therefore no longer quick-tempered and brutish? Again this isn't a horrible issue but we'd like some clarification.

    As of right now you are Denied
    You have 2 more tries, we look forward to hearing from you again if you have any questions you have our skypes.

    Posted in: PC Servers
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    posted a message on [1.6.2] Fallout: Reclamation ☢New Lore Added 7/19!☢New Ownership☢A new serious Fallout RP server!☢Completely new/original map an
    Quote from Dominic909


    In game name:Dominic909

    Character back-story (At least 3 paragraphs with no assuming faction roles):


    Your backstory should still be expanded more, it's hard to follow and should have more needed information, less irrelevant information. There also isn't a recently collapsed tower in our Denver map, because there's no reason it would survive bombing and collapse now randomly.

    Until your app (mainly your backstory) is improved, you are still denied.
    Posted in: PC Servers
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    posted a message on [1.6.2] Fallout: Reclamation ☢New Lore Added 7/19!☢New Ownership☢A new serious Fallout RP server!☢Completely new/original map an
    Quote from xXDrnachosXx

    I'm trying to think of a good character to be a legionare. And I can't have it that I'm already in the legion? My idea is that he ends up leaving the vault much earlier say 13 or so. He is captured by the Legion,enslaved and built up to be a legionare. Can I do that?

    Pyro recommended above that you should improve your knowledge on Caesar's Legion, so: http://fallout.wikia...ar's_Legion
    That should help you know the way of the legion.

    Also, I would recommend your character be somewhat pure (Atleast not a rapist-chem user), possibly gullible/loyal, the legion recruits whole tribes for their main recruitment thing, maybe a lone tribal if you know how to RP one.
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    posted a message on The World of Akantor [RP][SPOUT][CUSTOM PLUGINS]
    May or March something, like 20th? 2012

    Dear Beastnode,

    Fix your things, pretty please. I would like you to fix your stuff so we can play on the server again instead of doing the opposite and not doing playing on the server. I am sure some other people would prefer playing the server instead of not playing the server. Again, please fix your thingamajigees, so we can RP.

    Best of luck,
    Nolanwashere
    Posted in: PC Servers
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    posted a message on The Vault Roleplay [revamped!] We have launched!
    :( Enclave attacked Sprocket by jumping the walls. Shitty protection we has.
    Posted in: Minecraft Survival Servers (archive)
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    posted a message on The Vault Roleplay [revamped!] We have launched!
    Quote from Colbinile

    Anyone want to start a Caravan? We could be gun suppliers in San Francisco, maybe.


    My family and associates would be delighted to do business with gun running in the FUTURE, sincerely Andrews Clan FROM THE FUTURE
    Posted in: Minecraft Survival Servers (archive)
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