Eliza_Benetio (?): First: Is that your minecraft username? It's fine as an IC name, but we need your minecraft username to whitelist you. If so, that's cool, but still. Not too clear about that. Anyhow, minor spelling and grammar errors aside, your base app is Accepted, if you're willing to do away with the life and death part. Having the power to control life and death itself is WAY too OP. Light and Darkness is fine, to an extent. And by extent, I mean slightly brightening the environment, or dimming the lights in a room. Also, if I may make a suggestion, your mage app seems a bit short. I can't deny or accept you, but that's just my opinion. Anyhow, I would refrain from using magic and talking to animals for now, at least, until someone higher-up allows it. But yeah, mage app up for review, and base app Accepted.
Hillierpride: I have mixed feelings about the 'astonishing beauty' and the 'master of stealth' aspect. Just know you will be caught sometimes when doing stealth/thievery actions. And, men will be able to resist her charms here, or it would be PowerGaming. Of course, I'm sure you already know this. Aside from that, base app Accepted. Mage app up for review.
Okay, so, I can't speak for the others about canon. i also can't promise this will be adopted into lore, excluding your character, if you were hoping for that. Also, since the app was kinda shaky in coherence, I also can't say whether or not you wanted magic, if so, make the separate app to obtain magic. Oh, and due to the fact canon and coherence were both shaky (to me), until stated otherwise, my best guess is that these events either: A.) This happened in early Elysium years and the history is NOT to surface, or B.) This happened in another kingdom. One last criticism, I didn't like the 'lost birthdate' thing. If you could think of something and discover it IC sometime in the course of RP, that would be great.
Other than previously stated above, good app! Don't worry about the 'no experience' thing either. Trust me, you'll gain experience fast enough.
[b]Username: bryanhasateninch
[b]Age:13
[b]RP Experience: I have played RP for a long time on GMOD. I'm faithful and i know how to play. I know all the rules about metagaming and OOC and such.
[b]Anything else you want to note?:Is there an NLR like in GMOD? i figured not but just asking.
[b]Skype?: babeast99
In Character:
[b]Name: Bryan Frost
[b]Age:22
[b]Race: Hobbit
[b]Gender:Male
[b]Biography: Well I took the midnight train going anywhere and I ended up here. A beautiful town that i hoped to make my stay. I was born in a little shack of the coast of Gualamatahara. We didn't have much money and i was sent off to the army at the age of 7. My mother has past when i was 22. Our town was completely trashed so i took all i had and took that train. I found a couple of people that could help me with my town. Now I found a wife and have a very nice house. With the armour on my back and the tools in my pocket, i made my empire and hope to live the rest of my life here!
[b]Appearance: Short little guy. Not much clothes but enough to last for a couple of months. I have brown skin with long hair,lots of cuts all over my skin. Seem homeless to others.
Denied... Same family is dead, town looted by bandits cliche. Also, There are no hobbits. Choose a VALID race within our lore. Also, you start out with little to nothing. You can say you lost your 'empire' or give up the idea entirely.
101juliana101: Denied. Again. Your backstory just seems way too common. Like, the common parents are dead story, if that gives you an example. If you could try something different, maybe something more in-depth about your history and how you got to Elysium, that would be good.
Hello everyone, just thought I'd inform you that, if you haven't noticed already, two posts on the front page have been edited. I would suggest looking at them. That is all.
Thank you all for sticking with us for this long! We've put together a skype chat for everyone who added their skype in with their apps. If you'd like to be added, post it here, or send me an PM if you'd prefer not to put it on the thread.
Back after a rush of school duties. But enough about uninteresting topics such as my life. Onto my one (real) job as staff!
Happyface Return Whitelist Update:
Exspellio: Accepted.
Yep, we could tell you were a psychopath, but that's good! We could always use the insane to spice up the flow of RP. And, like everyone else stated, you app was very eloquently put. Always happy to see a well-written app. And I think I can guess where you drew your appearance from, heh. *coughyourprofilepiccough*. Always good to see another who was on fallout RP servers too. :3
Username: Su1cid4L Age: 15 RP Experience:Yes Anything else you want to note?: I love cookies
s --- In Character: Name: Lathron Erurainion Age: 637 Race: Elf Gender: Male Biography: Lathron was born into an elvish community, which was rare. Now, you would think that his parents would pay attention to him a lot for the first year or so, but that was the complete opposite. Lathron had to learn how to get food and change his own diapers by the time he was only 89. His parents, were exactly, the.... caring type. They only cared about their work, which was enchanting items, and selling them in the black market. As most elves, Lathron wanted to learn about magic, so he asked his dad if he could learn how to enchant. His dad smacked him, and told him to never ask that question again. Lathron soon felt like he was a waste, because he wasn't learning magic like the other kids. Normally, elves would go to school and learn about archery and magic there, but Lathron's parents were greedy and used all the money they obtained for themselves. By the time Lathron was 173, he decided that he needed another way to learn magic.
One day, Lathron was wandering the streets when he saw a teacher walking home from school. He went up to him and asked him if he could teach him how to use magic, but the response was no. Day after day, Lathron kept asking until the teacher said yes. So, Lathron was told to meet the teacher at the Spire, which he did. However, he was met by a ball of magic, and he blacked out. So, began his journey, to learn about magic, and the odds and ends of it. Lathron ended up learning about how to enchant, which was his goal, but he didn't learn much until, the Teacher fell sick. With his last words, he told Lathron to go to Elysium.
Lathron, heeded the wise words and began to prepare for his journey. He packed every essential items that an elf would need. Books, Bow and Arrows, A Wooden Sword, and many herbs. As he was packing, he decided to bring along some money, but he didn't have any on him at the time, so he went to the Teacher's house to nab some spare coins. While there, he noticed two shadowy figures in the house when he opened the door. Slowly, he pulled out his bow and notched an arrow. He took aim at the person with long hair and fired.
A piercing scream was heard for miles as the arrow entered the neck of the victim. The taller figure turned around and shot a ball of fire at Lathron. Lathron dodged the fireball but his exit burst into flames. Lathron quickly notched another arrow, and put down the woman. The man stood up, and walked out of the shadows, and Lathron recognized him immediately, as his own father, who didn't care about him during his early years. This, combined with the fact that he was stealing from his mentor's house, ed him off, and he pulled out his wooden sword and charged at his dad. His dad, frozen in his spot, accepted the sword and the sword plunged into his abdomen, and once Lathron pulled it out, he crumpled to the floor, dead.
After the incident, Lathron gathered his composure and began to look for more loose change to pay for travel expenses. He ended up finding around 45 gold, which was enough to get him to the docks, but not much further. So he had to create a plan, to get to Elysium. So, after weeks of preparing, Lathron began his way to Elysium, by first, renting a horse, which he gave back at the other store at the docks, which brought him to the docks, and left him with 12 Gold left. With that gold, Lathron bought a sailor outfit, and crept onto the boat, which was headed to Elysium.
As he boarded the boat, he noticed that many high end elves were on, and that the crew was to be on their best behavior. During the boat ride, the captain did a head count and noticed that there was an extra crew member. Normally, he wouldn't mind, but since the rich elves were on, he had to make sure that nobody got on, to assassinate one of them. So, he told all of the crew to line up, and he asked each person their name. Once he got to Lathron, he asked him for his name, so Lathron obliged. The captain told him, that he had never heard of him, and then, told the crew to grab him and investigate him, to see if he was a murderer, or something of the sorts.
As Lathron was getting pulled into the investigation room, or the lower decks. He had a bloody lip and a black eye, from when he was apprehended. The captain soon came down to talk to Lathron asking him cliche questions such as "Who are you?" and "Why are you here?" and "Who do you want to kill?". Lathron answered the questions, but not extensively. He did tell them his name, but not why he was on the boat. Soon, the captain came to the conclusion, that Lathron wasn't a threat and that he was a freeloader, who came on the boat without paying. However, since he was working for most of the time, Lathron paid off the debt, and he was allowed to leave, once the boat landed in Elysium.
Lathron, a little scared after almost being killed, decided to ask some of the elves, how they were doing. Most answered him with a "I'm doing well" or "Ok". There was one elf, who had her head buried in a newspaper. As Lathron approached her, she took a stick and knocked him out cold. This alarmed everyone, and they called for help. As crew members were entering the room, she took a bow and arrow and quickly shot down crew member after crew member, as they entered. Once she ran out of arrows, she began to shoot balls of fire at the door, which caused major structural damage to the boat. Soon, it was the woman and the Captain. As the woman shot fireballs, the Captain shot arrows. The arrows and fire tended to collide which caused a fire arrow to fly at the woman. After a minute of dodging and weaving, the woman grew sluggish and started to slow down, and that is when the Captain took advantage, and took the battle to Close Quarters Combat. As the captain grew close, he swung his fist and practically, broke the woman in half.
After the battle, the boat was on fire, and there was no way to save it, so the Captain told everyone to bail, considering that they could see Elysium. As everyone was bailing, Lathron woke up, and discovered the mayhem that occurred. He, like the others, bailed and swam to shore. Everyone was safe, but all items were lost. Now Lathron begins a new journey in Elysium. He still doesn't know what the teacher meant by going to Elysium, but he was there, and he decided to look for a Mage's Guild first. Lathron now has to gain the trust of the locals, and learn about the land, but, after the boat incident, he has another goal. To find out who the woman on the boat was, and what she wanted.
Appearance: He is like any other elf, but he has green eyes, which is surprisingly uncommon. He is a normal height for an elf, standing at 5' 10". He has muscle on him, but is skinny like most of the other elves. His hands look humanly, h, instead of elfish, which is odd. His hair is a brownish colour and short. http://www.minecraft...73747/wood-elf/
MAGE APP Name: Lathron Erurainion Age: 637 Race: Elf How did they learn magic?: Well, Lathron was born into an enchanting family but that doesn't mean that he was taught how to use it. His parents often neglected him, and that lead to Lathron not.... learning magic as other elves usually did. His parents couldn't afford to send him to a proper school, since they made money, selling stolen goods that they enchanted, in the black market. Since his parents were never there for Lathron, he found an alternative way to learn magic. One day, he found a teacher walking home from a long day of work. Lathron went up to the man and asked him if he could help Lathron learn more about magic. Naturally, the teacher told Lathron to get away, so he did. The next day, Lathron did the same thing, with no avail. Day after day, Lathron kept asking the teacher to train him, all with the same answer; No.
One day, the teacher finally agreed to train Lathron. Lathron never knew if the teacher actually cared, or if he was annoyed by the constant nagging. So the teacher told him to meet at the Spire at Saturday at 3:00. So, Lathron met the teacher at the Spire, and as soon as Lathron came into view, the teacher blasted him with his strongest magic, and Lathron flew back, and blacked out immediately. When Lathron woke up, he was in the middle of a forest, and had no sense of his surroundings, or where he was. He looked around and found a note tucked in his pocket. "Experience, is the best way to learn". Lathron also found a compass in his other pocket. So days passed and Lathron actually began to live in the wild, and he learned how to create a spear to obtain food, and to protect him from monsters at night. Soon, Lathron became... one with nature, He became an expert at archery, and crafting spears. However, he was soon removed from his jungle, when the teacher interrupted him, saying that he had been watching Lathron the whole time, and that, now began his true magic training. The teacher introduced himself as Eleywn and told Lathron that he had a lot of training to do, if he wanted to come close, to being a Master Mage. Eleywn asked Lathron what he wanted to learn, and Lathron responded with one word. Enchanting. It was his dream to follow in his "parents" foot steps and become a great enchanter, like them. Eleywn nodded and ushered Lathron to his lab/mage room. Lathron looked around in awe at all the fancy potions and scrolls on the walls and in vials. However, one thing caught his eye. Something that he had seen plenty around his house. An enchanting table.
Eleywn noticed Lathron's sudden interest in the table, and asked him if he had seen one before. Lathron nodded, but his eyes were glazed on the enchanting table. He had only seen glimpses of the table when his mom and dad opened the door to enter, or leave the enchanting room at his house. Eleywn explained how an enchanting table worked, and how to use it. Lathron was overjoyed and couldn't wait to use it, however, his ime using it would be short. After a couple weeks of learning the basics of enchanting, Eleywn thought that Lathron could learn some more advanced tips, such as enchanting tools and armour, but Eleywn could only teach him the basics, before he became deadly ill. Lathron asked Eleywn if he could do anything, but Eleywn shook his head and told Lathron that there was nothing that he could do. Eleywn, with his last breath told Lathron to do one thing. Go to Elysium.
Are they in the Mages' guild, and if not- will they join?: Lathron will join in the future, if his heart desires.
What type of things will they do with magic?: Lathron isn't one to fight unless he feels like he, or one of his friends are in danger. Because of that, Lathron doesn't know much about the fighting and harming magic, but he knows more about passive magic, so he intends to use that in Elysium, for anyone who has the coin.
Good God that is an improvement. Only one problem I saw in it, and that was he seems a bit old, Elysium was created roughly around 4 years ago, but I digress. You did a lot better.
Base App: Accepted.
Mage App: Accepted! Realize that enchanting is weak, therefore you probably should only know level one enchantings. Congratulations on being the first (Non-Staff) Mage in Elysium!
TomiMaFox: Accepted. I assume he read about Elysium in one of his books, and decided to start a new life there, since you never really addressed that in your Bio. And Orik will probably be disappointed when he finds out it's a peaceful era in Elysium. Times can change, though. And please, add an appearance. Text or picture of skin works, however I do prefer picture of skin.
DecyaingAt0m: Denied. Dude, I don't know if English is your first language or not, but my God there were a LOT of errors with grammar, punctuation, and spelling in your biography. Also, the majority of Elysium isn't racists, so he wouldn't be changing a lot of people's minds about lizardpeople.
jasper15337-f**k it: Denied, even in other lands, the lore of this server has a very low mage population count. Adjust your backstory. Also, the weight of dwarven armor and warhammers on eternally would probably crush his tiny body after a few years. Just saying.
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gordasso: Accepted.
Jighftw: Accepted.
pizzaflyer12: Accepted.
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Eliza_Benetio (?): First: Is that your minecraft username? It's fine as an IC name, but we need your minecraft username to whitelist you. If so, that's cool, but still. Not too clear about that. Anyhow, minor spelling and grammar errors aside, your base app is Accepted, if you're willing to do away with the life and death part. Having the power to control life and death itself is WAY too OP. Light and Darkness is fine, to an extent. And by extent, I mean slightly brightening the environment, or dimming the lights in a room. Also, if I may make a suggestion, your mage app seems a bit short. I can't deny or accept you, but that's just my opinion. Anyhow, I would refrain from using magic and talking to animals for now, at least, until someone higher-up allows it. But yeah, mage app up for review, and base app Accepted.
Hillierpride: I have mixed feelings about the 'astonishing beauty' and the 'master of stealth' aspect. Just know you will be caught sometimes when doing stealth/thievery actions. And, men will be able to resist her charms here, or it would be PowerGaming. Of course, I'm sure you already know this. Aside from that, base app Accepted. Mage app up for review.
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http://mcelysium.enjin.com/
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stereo_head: Accepted, now, explanation time.
Okay, so, I can't speak for the others about canon. i also can't promise this will be adopted into lore, excluding your character, if you were hoping for that. Also, since the app was kinda shaky in coherence, I also can't say whether or not you wanted magic, if so, make the separate app to obtain magic. Oh, and due to the fact canon and coherence were both shaky (to me), until stated otherwise, my best guess is that these events either: A.) This happened in early Elysium years and the history is NOT to surface, or B.) This happened in another kingdom. One last criticism, I didn't like the 'lost birthdate' thing. If you could think of something and discover it IC sometime in the course of RP, that would be great.
Other than previously stated above, good app! Don't worry about the 'no experience' thing either. Trust me, you'll gain experience fast enough.
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Denied... Same family is dead, town looted by bandits cliche. Also, There are no hobbits. Choose a VALID race within our lore. Also, you start out with little to nothing. You can say you lost your 'empire' or give up the idea entirely.
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You can vote for Ryzo, (MosueMan), Rorik, (JosephTC), and Galdoron(?), (I believe shadowkoroma).
Good luck to the runners, and choose wisely when voting!
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101juliana101: Denied... Your backstory just feels too short. Expand onto it, and go into details, please.
Chellizard: Accepted.
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Here's the I.P: 216.245.217.98:47384
IF YOU HAVE NOT BEEN WHITELISTED, YOU WILL BE MOMENTARILY.
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Thank you all for sticking with us for this long! We've put together a skype chat for everyone who added their skype in with their apps. If you'd like to be added, post it here, or send me an PM if you'd prefer not to put it on the thread.
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Happyface Return Whitelist Update:
Exspellio: Accepted.
Yep, we could tell you were a psychopath, but that's good! We could always use the insane to spice up the flow of RP. And, like everyone else stated, you app was very eloquently put. Always happy to see a well-written app. And I think I can guess where you drew your appearance from, heh. *coughyourprofilepiccough*. Always good to see another who was on fallout RP servers too. :3
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Good God that is an improvement. Only one problem I saw in it, and that was he seems a bit old, Elysium was created roughly around 4 years ago, but I digress. You did a lot better.
Base App: Accepted.
Mage App: Accepted! Realize that enchanting is weak, therefore you probably should only know level one enchantings. Congratulations on being the first (Non-Staff) Mage in Elysium!
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TomiMaFox: Accepted. I assume he read about Elysium in one of his books, and decided to start a new life there, since you never really addressed that in your Bio. And Orik will probably be disappointed when he finds out it's a peaceful era in Elysium. Times can change, though. And please, add an appearance. Text or picture of skin works, however I do prefer picture of skin.
DecyaingAt0m: Denied. Dude, I don't know if English is your first language or not, but my God there were a LOT of errors with grammar, punctuation, and spelling in your biography. Also, the majority of Elysium isn't racists, so he wouldn't be changing a lot of people's minds about lizardpeople.
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jasper15337-f**k it: Denied, even in other lands, the lore of this server has a very low mage population count. Adjust your backstory. Also, the weight of dwarven armor and warhammers on eternally would probably crush his tiny body after a few years. Just saying.