So, I've been working on this animation on and off for about a year and this is the end result, the first episode of my animated series, The Blocking Dead! Would appreciate any feedback!
[1:01] "All I wanted is to play some survival."
Hardcore is still survival, it's only the hardest difficulty.
[1:11] "If you want to stay alive, your best bet is to team up with me."
What?! He said he wanted to kill himself, he doesn't WANT to be alive.
[1:14] "Yeah, you little ."
Childish player detected.
[1:16] "We ain't got no group unless we get to know each other"
Who agreed to becoming a group again, and what makes them the lead?
[1:53] "We've got more important things to do. We need to get some shelter build ASAP."
So they've just walked away from the fact that they're all in a hardcore server in which you do not want to play, nor can you log out of?! Why are they even following with him anyways? He just insulted one of them, acting like a complete douche! Just because he can yell like a cussing child, doesn't mean he is capable of survival or leadership!
This is the point where I've lost complete interest in the video and just skimmed through.
Overall, this animation was extremely rushed through with uninteresting and annoying characters with their unnecessary amount of cussing used (starts to get extremely annoying, and destroys attempted humor). The animation wasn't too bad, but had some rough edges to it. The script is the biggest problem of the video. 4/10
This is a small critique and should not be taken emotionally.
EXTRA NOTE:
"The Blocking Dead" title was already used many times, and isn't exactly original.
[1:01] "All I wanted is to play some survival."
Hardcore is still survival, it's only the hardest difficulty.
[1:11] "If you want to stay alive, your best bet is to team up with me."
What?! He said he wanted to kill himself, he doesn't WANT to be alive.
[1:14] "Yeah, you little ."
Childish player detected.
[1:16] "We ain't got no group unless we get to know each other"
Who agreed to becoming a group again, and what makes them the lead?
[1:53] "We've got more important things to do. We need to get some shelter build ASAP."
So they've just walked away from the fact that they're all in a hardcore server in which you do not want to play, nor can you log out of?! Why are they even following with him anyways? He just insulted one of them, acting like a complete douche! Just because he can yell like a cussing child, doesn't mean he is capable of survival or leadership!
This is the point where I've lost complete interest in the video and just skimmed through.
Overall, this animation was extremely rushed through with uninteresting and annoying characters with their unnecessary amount of cussing used (starts to get extremely annoying, and destroys attempted humor). The animation wasn't too bad, but had some rough edges to it. The script is the biggest problem of the video. 4/10
This is a small critique and should not be taken emotionally.
EXTRA NOTE:
"The Blocking Dead" title was already used many times, and isn't exactly original.
Gonna respond to your little criticisms in small sections. But yes, I do realize the writing wasn't very strong for this episode, it was written a year and a half ago.
Anyways, hardcore is considered a whole different gametype in the game, yes its a form of survival but the character in question wanted to play on a server where they could die and respawn.
He was addressing not only the kid who wanted to kill himself but the rest of the group.
Creeper mask guy is sorta like a bully to the kill yourself kid, they're friends yes, but its a friendship that seems a bit abusive. His character will revolve around that. The kill yourself kid just goes and does whatever his friend says because hes a pushover.
Mario guy and the other guy are buddies and creeper guy pretty much already gave in to grouping up with them when he called his buddy a little .
Again, what I stated above, theyre following him because he's asserted himself as leader, mario guy is his friend, creeper guy gave in and creeper guys friend really has no say in the matter, and big k is just kind of there.
Cussing has already been noted and I won't have the characters swear as much the next episode or any other episode after that. Though I am not going to rule out swearing entirely.
Thanks for the criticism, it actually helps me do better, no matter how harsh it is! So again, thanks!
Gonna respond to your little criticisms in small sections. But yes, I do realize the writing wasn't very strong for this episode, it was written a year and a half ago.
Anyways, hardcore is considered a whole different gametype in the game, yes its a form of survival but the character in question wanted to play on a server where they could die and respawn.
He was addressing not only the kid who wanted to kill himself but the rest of the group.
Creeper mask guy is sorta like a bully to the kill yourself kid, they're friends yes, but its a friendship that seems a bit abusive. His character will revolve around that. The kill yourself kid just goes and does whatever his friend says because hes a pushover.
Mario guy and the other guy are buddies and creeper guy pretty much already gave in to grouping up with them when he called his buddy a little .
Again, what I stated above, theyre following him because he's asserted himself as leader, mario guy is his friend, creeper guy gave in and creeper guys friend really has no say in the matter, and big k is just kind of there.
Cussing has already been noted and I won't have the characters swear as much the next episode or any other episode after that. Though I am not going to rule out swearing entirely.
Thanks for the criticism, it actually helps me do better, no matter how harsh it is! So again, thanks!
Thank you for keeping your reply positive. I know my critique was pretty harsh, and apologies for that. I'm just trying to keep things honest to help out. I'm eager to see how the rest of your series goes, and wish you the best of luck.
Enjoy!
Hardcore is still survival, it's only the hardest difficulty.
[1:11] "If you want to stay alive, your best bet is to team up with me."
What?! He said he wanted to kill himself, he doesn't WANT to be alive.
[1:14] "Yeah, you little ."
Childish player detected.
[1:16] "We ain't got no group unless we get to know each other"
Who agreed to becoming a group again, and what makes them the lead?
[1:53] "We've got more important things to do. We need to get some shelter build ASAP."
So they've just walked away from the fact that they're all in a hardcore server in which you do not want to play, nor can you log out of?! Why are they even following with him anyways? He just insulted one of them, acting like a complete douche! Just because he can yell like a cussing child, doesn't mean he is capable of survival or leadership!
This is the point where I've lost complete interest in the video and just skimmed through.
Overall, this animation was extremely rushed through with uninteresting and annoying characters with their unnecessary amount of cussing used (starts to get extremely annoying, and destroys attempted humor). The animation wasn't too bad, but had some rough edges to it. The script is the biggest problem of the video. 4/10
This is a small critique and should not be taken emotionally.
EXTRA NOTE:
"The Blocking Dead" title was already used many times, and isn't exactly original.
Gonna respond to your little criticisms in small sections. But yes, I do realize the writing wasn't very strong for this episode, it was written a year and a half ago.
Anyways, hardcore is considered a whole different gametype in the game, yes its a form of survival but the character in question wanted to play on a server where they could die and respawn.
He was addressing not only the kid who wanted to kill himself but the rest of the group.
Creeper mask guy is sorta like a bully to the kill yourself kid, they're friends yes, but its a friendship that seems a bit abusive. His character will revolve around that. The kill yourself kid just goes and does whatever his friend says because hes a pushover.
Mario guy and the other guy are buddies and creeper guy pretty much already gave in to grouping up with them when he called his buddy a little .
Again, what I stated above, theyre following him because he's asserted himself as leader, mario guy is his friend, creeper guy gave in and creeper guys friend really has no say in the matter, and big k is just kind of there.
Cussing has already been noted and I won't have the characters swear as much the next episode or any other episode after that. Though I am not going to rule out swearing entirely.
Thanks for the criticism, it actually helps me do better, no matter how harsh it is! So again, thanks!
Thank you for keeping your reply positive. I know my critique was pretty harsh, and apologies for that. I'm just trying to keep things honest to help out. I'm eager to see how the rest of your series goes, and wish you the best of luck.