The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
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Although I said nothing, I've been a pretty big fan of this from the start, and I think you're going to have a lot of fans eventually, but this story seems pretty good to me, and I do hope you can possibly post chapters faster, but still take your time.
Although I said nothing, I've been a pretty big fan of this from the start, and I think you're going to have a lot of fans eventually, but this story seems pretty good to me, and I do hope you can possibly post chapters faster, but still take your time.
Lately my time for writing has been cut down dramatically by several of my final exams and other stuff. But as they are over now, I can start writing like a maniac again (I have a lot of ideas in my head at the moment).
What do you think about the story so far? Have I made any mistakes about characters being overpowered or something like that? Just let me know.
Fire is definitely overpowered, but in a way, that is part of his charm. Plus, with the way you've set up the Minecraft universe, pretty much anything goes. Not a mistake at all.
Also, I see you still do not have a banner for your story. I can make one for you, if you like.
I got sucked in and finally caught up on your story. 'Twas so much fun to read! Your knack for creativity really makes the story come alive.
Fire is definitely overpowered, but in a way, that is part of his charm. Plus, with the way you've set up the Minecraft universe, pretty much anything goes. Not a mistake at all.
Also, I see you still do not have a banner for your story. I can make one for you, if you like.
I would love to have a signature and I think it would help out considering most autors have one nowadays ^^
Chapter 24 is (finally) out!
Let me explain the delay: During the summer holidays, there were several delaying factors for me, including my computer's hard drive breaking and me losing all my data (the story and all my important data was on my external hard drive fortunately). The other thing was, that I corrected most of my mistakes in the existing 23 chapters, I changed some things around and gave it a generally better formatting. More chapters will come soonish as I have tons of ideas in my head now.
Have fun reading ^^
Chapter 26 is out
I finally got done making all the paragraphs (which I should have done WAY earlier), well now that it is done I won't complain.
Have fun reading ^^
I can be found on Freenode IRC channels #pocketmine, #ModPEScripts, #LegendOfMCPE, #pmplugins or #BeaconMine.
I am a PocketMine-MP plugin developer. I hate it when people think that I love stupid admin positions. Being an admin is nothing compared to being a plugin developer.
I am also a main developer of BlockServer, a work-in-progress MCPE server software. You are welcome to download it, but it so far onlly spawns you in the upther (above the world). You can chat, though.
I do not own this server but I just love to put this banner here:
Okay, Chapter 27 is out now
Hmm... I really need to update those notes in the beginning. There is a lot of new stuff to say there. Well, in this chapter I have tried out an a little different style, I need to get some decent tension going.
Have fun reading ^^
Not complaining, just that the chapter sounds like saying only one thing, ans seems relatively short.
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I can be found on Freenode IRC channels #pocketmine, #ModPEScripts, #LegendOfMCPE, #pmplugins or #BeaconMine.
I am a PocketMine-MP plugin developer. I hate it when people think that I love stupid admin positions. Being an admin is nothing compared to being a plugin developer.
I am also a main developer of BlockServer, a work-in-progress MCPE server software. You are welcome to download it, but it so far onlly spawns you in the upther (above the world). You can chat, though.
I do not own this server but I just love to put this banner here:
Chapter 28 is out now
Admit it, this chapter has made you feel a weird feeling in your chest. ;P
@Hinaidra I really appreciate positive feedback. And don't worry, I will keep writing.
Have fun reading ^^
I'll make quick review about what i have read jet (untill chapter 28)
Spoilers ahead!
This is a story about five friends traveling in mystical, sometimes hostile wonder world. Magic enchanting, strange brewing, life force, supernatural creatures (Artifical Intelligence?), brain-computer interface... lightning bolts. it's hard to explain by modding only.
It doesnt fit me at first, but when i stopped trying to make everything sense in code (bad programmist behaviour) and treat story as an fantastic novel, i got sucked in it. Really.
I read it all in three hours.
Author have really rare ability to make us care about characters. Maybe because of accurate descriptions what they are feeling (Like when they are wounded, or drank a potion), so we can easly place ourselves in their situation.
Second strong aspect is mystery element. We all know Minecraft pretty well and thing like fight with Wither boss wouldn't be very mystical. We all know, how Wither behaves, nothing surprising... well exciteing, but not surprising. But creatures in Fire's world are far more diffrent than normal mobs. They have a little diffrent properties than their equivalents in Minecraft.(Creepers exploding when hit in the head, for example)
We don't know what strange creatures live in this world (Oalrhm really surprised me). Thankfully Fire is politely explaning everything to his friends, making things understandable and gaining us acces to this world of wonder.
Mystery, characters and of course minecraft are making this story great (so far). Let's talk about things that happen to every story: drawbacks.
Fire is 'a little' overpowered. Christ he is an 3-metres high fireproof reptile with claws! And he is a great master of magic, enchanting and brewing. He is also a keeper of mystical knowledge. I am surprised that in the Desert Mine everyone treat him normally...
So, i wonder if Fire is an mentor (guy guiding and helping hero/heroes achieve his/their goal), or a hero(guy saving the world) in this story. He could be both but... this make rest of the characters a little useless. When Fire disappears a;most dying, his friends are saying that they could not save the world without him. Whats true... but if any other character would die (Ambigious) they still could achieve their goal. Anyway i don't know what happens in further story so i won't judge. But i hope Fire will be an mentor.
About the appearance... It's hard to read this wall of text even if it's very good. Try to make some paragrafs.
My rateing? The square root of minus one divided by Sierpinski Triangle. I really can't fit it into a numbers.
English isn't my native language too (long live to the Google translator!) so correct me if i made any gramatical errors.
Thanks on the review. I can explain some stuff to you that you "indirectly asked" about:
Regarding Fire himself: Fire might be very strong but as you saw, he could be taken out easily by a relatively weak creature (and believe me, that skeletal mage was weak in comparison to what the server has in store). Fire is an allrounder, he is good at everything but not perfect.
About other charakters dying: Fire has mentioned this once or twice, only the five of them can save the world, the Ban Hammer cannot be created by a single person. It is the Fire can't save the world without his friends and his friends can't save the world without Fire type deal.
This is not meant to be offending in any way (just making sure), I am just responding. Keep reading, I'll try to put out chapters as often as possible.
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Lately my time for writing has been cut down dramatically by several of my final exams and other stuff. But as they are over now, I can start writing like a maniac again (I have a lot of ideas in my head at the moment).
Fire is definitely overpowered, but in a way, that is part of his charm. Plus, with the way you've set up the Minecraft universe, pretty much anything goes. Not a mistake at all.
Also, I see you still do not have a banner for your story. I can make one for you, if you like.
I would love to have a signature and I think it would help out considering most autors have one nowadays ^^
Awesome! Will do!
Have fun reading ^^
Let me explain the delay: During the summer holidays, there were several delaying factors for me, including my computer's hard drive breaking and me losing all my data (the story and all my important data was on my external hard drive fortunately). The other thing was, that I corrected most of my mistakes in the existing 23 chapters, I changed some things around and gave it a generally better formatting. More chapters will come soonish as I have tons of ideas in my head now.
Have fun reading ^^
Well, I noticed that I f'd up the paragraphs with my last update a lot... Time to get fixin' again...
Have fun reading ^^
No idea honestly, but judging by the amount of ideas for the story I have in my head, it will be 100ish, maybe more, maybe less.
I finally got done making all the paragraphs (which I should have done WAY earlier), well now that it is done I won't complain.
Have fun reading ^^
That is because I didn't have a real magic user in the story yet. Yet.
@pieter Soon, school is keeping me busy atm but I am working on chapter 27
Hmm... I really need to update those notes in the beginning. There is a lot of new stuff to say there. Well, in this chapter I have tried out an a little different style, I need to get some decent tension going.
Have fun reading ^^
Admit it, this chapter has made you feel a weird feeling in your chest. ;P
@Hinaidra I really appreciate positive feedback. And don't worry, I will keep writing.
Have fun reading ^^
Thanks on the review. I can explain some stuff to you that you "indirectly asked" about:
Regarding Fire himself: Fire might be very strong but as you saw, he could be taken out easily by a relatively weak creature (and believe me, that skeletal mage was weak in comparison to what the server has in store). Fire is an allrounder, he is good at everything but not perfect.
About other charakters dying: Fire has mentioned this once or twice, only the five of them can save the world, the Ban Hammer cannot be created by a single person. It is the Fire can't save the world without his friends and his friends can't save the world without Fire type deal.
This is not meant to be offending in any way (just making sure), I am just responding. Keep reading, I'll try to put out chapters as often as possible.