Chapter 1- Boring Inc.
Robert Peterson woke up in his small 4 room apartment. He turned on his bedside lamp and walked over to his small dresser. He pulled on his pinstripe suit and went into the bathroom. He opened up his mirror and took out his razor+ shaving cream. Robert was a tall, thin man with short black hair, green eyes and a very minor beard.
He got on shaving cream and started shaving. He did this every day, he didnt want to have a beard. Afterwards he pulled out his red toothbrush and put on some mint toothpaste. He brushed as he always did and went into the kitchen. He poured himself some coffee and started reading the paper. There was just the usual article about the congress disagreeing with eachother and some sport teams results.
At 9:00 Robert got into his small silver car and went off to Bedrock Office. He lived downtown, so there werent many houses. He drove down east 33rd and turned onto main street. At the corner of mainstreet and 19th Street was a tall, gray brick officebuilding with a sign that read "Bedrock Office" and went inside.
Robert was a rookie worker there, as he was only 26, and when he stepped inside, was face to face with his boss, Dan. Dan greeted him with "Because of your recent work you've been promoted to Senior worker."
Before as a rookie Robert got 10$ an hour, but now he got 20$ an hour. There were many products produced in Bedrock Office, Robert worked in the department of antivirus. He was an editor, so he made small tweaks to the design. It was an extremely large office building, with 200+ workers and many departments, which is why alot of people called it boring inc.
Chapter 2: Suburban Kid
Matt Johnson woke up at 7:00 in his small bedroom. He had a coffee table, a bed, and a desk for homework with many drawers and his laptop ontop of his dresser. Matt went down to the kitchen, sat down on the wooden chair and poured himself some cereal. After breakfeast he went and washed his face. Matt was a medium sized 14 year old with shaggy black hair and blue eyes wearing a black hoodie with ripped jeans. Matt grabbed his Science homework (they had to do an explanation on what foods affect cows), yelled "See ya mom!" and set off through the door. He grabbed his bright blue skateboard, went down the bumpy pavement down to the highschool. On his way he remembered in a flash it was a career day and report card day! Matt popped his skateboard, put it in his bag and went inside.
First period was history. They talked about the first minecraft colonies and the inventor of mushroom stew.
Right after science the loudspeaker said "Matt Johnson" and he went down to the principals office for career day.
He was greeted by his science teacher, Mr. Collins who slided out Matt's report card.
Matt looked at it and saw his grades. History- B+, Social Studies- B, Math- A-, English B, and Science A+
"Well Mr. Johnson," started Mr. Collins "I recommend a mob bioligest because of your good overall cooperation, and a scientest because of your science and math grades. So think those over." The bell rang and Matt set off for Social Studies.
Hmm, the format of this story really hooked me. I wonder how you will paint out the rest of the story with multiple-point of views. I am really liking the idea of a multi-first person perspective.
Hmm, the format of this story really hooked me. I wonder how you will paint out the rest of the story with multiple-point of views. I am really liking the idea of a multi-first person perspective.
Chapter 3: Court
2 days after recieveing his promotion, Robert was working when he got a phone call. He picked up his small blue cell phone and saw it was his friend Sarah from the department of law enforcement. "Hey Rob, I have a court session tommorow at 12:00 but I cant make it. Can you fill in for me?"
"Sure."
"Thanks, I appreciate it."
Robert pressed the end button and got back to his work. At 5:30 he made himself some chicken, did more work and went to bed.
The next day Robert drank his coffee, kicked back and watched some TV. At 12:00 he got in his car, drove down 2 miles, turned right and parked.
The court was large with 2 sets of chairs for the watchers, 1 large stand for the jury and the tables. After every arrived the judge with short gray hair started
"What has Leroy Washington done?"
A short man said "He was dealing drugs."
"Leroy you may tell your side of the story."
"I was selling some drugs at my drug store to help cure sickness."
The short man's lawyer then said "But they were illegal and i have proof!"
"You see, this particular drug that was the special featured one says cure vomiting instantly, but when you peel the label off, it says Macia which is an illeagal energy boosting drug that causes hallucinations."
"I... you..." Leroy stammered.
"The jury may now decide who is correct."
After 5 minutes of talking the jury was finished.
"In a 11-0 vote the jury believes he WAS selling illegal drugs." Robert said.
The cops rushed Leroy off to jail but one returned and declared "Leroy has been sentenced to 5 years."
Chapter 4: Prison
Leroy Washington woke up on his first day in prison. According to his striped hat he was Prisoner 362. He sat around in his lonely cell when at 10:30 the cell doors opened and a loudspeaker said "Prisoner 362 please report to the main office."
Leroy walked down past the medium security cells, past a guard with a bat cracking his knuckles, and into the main office. A tall, young man wearing a blue police uniform started "Here in the prison you can get off early if you do some service. We have a mine that you will dig into. Leave the minerals if you find any! The police will collect them after every day. The mine is located in a wall of the prison. If you plan to escape, think again. We've set up electric gates all the way down to bedrock around the mine. Now get moving!"
Leroy grabbed a pickaxe, and went down the hall to the mine.
The mine was extremely large. There were twisting, different level corridors with prisoners everywhere breaking away stone. Leroy went down a small hallway and broke away the stone on his right. All that he found was another hall. He tried his left next. Nothing so he kept digging that way. He was digging and saw something dark. He cleared away some dust and found some coal. Not a huge find, but it was his first. He started digging a clear area to be a mining station. There he found more coal, and even a small oil pool. He picked up the oil in a bucket he was given. A person pushing a minecart came down and tossed Leroy a tunafish sandwhich. He ate it then dug some more. Eventually he had a 10x10 meter room. Another minecart came down and the man said "Any oil?" Leroy put in his oil bucket and went back to his cell. At about 10:00 the loudspeaker said "Thank you prisoners. Today we got 4 buckets of oil, 7 peices of coal and 2 iron peices. Everyone gets 5 days off their time. The man in the cell next to Leroy yelled "Yes! Only 2 days left for me to serve!"
Chapter 5: Scientists and Mob Biologists
John and James Deangelo woke up at 12:00 and went down to the suburban lab. John and James were 25 year old twins. They both had black hair and wore white labcoats. The only way you could tell them apart (besides their nametags) were James had lighter hair and was slightly taller. Their eyes were stormy gray. When they arrived in their black car, they saw their assistant Sally pull in. She stepped out with (to their suprise) her son Matt. "Matt this is John and James, John and James this is Matt."
"Sup" Said Matt.
Matt bumped fists with James and High Fived John.
"James is a scientest and John is a mob biologist." Sally informed Matt.
James led Matt to something that looked like 4 robotlike hands with a U at the end facing one spot. "This is a lava reactor. It still has bugs to work out so we use water for now." James said. He flipped a switch, typed in a code on a keypad and some water in the middle of the hands started bending pointlessly. John led them into a room marked John's Mob Study, "These guys are great. They work for the national goverment."
John opened the door and they stepped into a small room with covered windows and a wooden door on the left and a metal one on the right. First John motioned them into the door on the right. There were many test tubes, files and lots of studying instruments. Matt went over to the test tubes and saw 5 beakers labeled.
They had code apparently because there were only 1-5 and X+O. "And now what you've all been waiting for..." Started John catching Matt off guard "The test room!" He announced opening the wooden door.
What Matt first saw was breathtaking. There was straw everywhere, the sound of rushing water and grassy pens. By every pen there was a sign and some studying equipment. Matt went over to the wolf pen and it was grooming its fur. He went over to the studying equipent. There was a microscope and a beaker labeled Wolf Fur.
Matt wandered around there for about an hour when he had to go home. He asked his mom how she helps and she said "I help out with the studying. I make most of the small improvements while John and James make the large ones.
I really like the story! The only problems I see are:
There are just too many characters for me to keep up with!
There are small introductions, but not too much detail in the chapters.
I'm sorry if I seem a bit harsh, but I really think this series could end up going very well!
Robert Peterson woke up in his small 4 room apartment. He turned on his bedside lamp and walked over to his small dresser. He pulled on his pinstripe suit and went into the bathroom. He opened up his mirror and took out his razor+ shaving cream. Robert was a tall, thin man with short black hair, green eyes and a very minor beard.
He got on shaving cream and started shaving. He did this every day, he didnt want to have a beard. Afterwards he pulled out his red toothbrush and put on some mint toothpaste. He brushed as he always did and went into the kitchen. He poured himself some coffee and started reading the paper. There was just the usual article about the congress disagreeing with eachother and some sport teams results.
At 9:00 Robert got into his small silver car and went off to Bedrock Office. He lived downtown, so there werent many houses. He drove down east 33rd and turned onto main street. At the corner of mainstreet and 19th Street was a tall, gray brick officebuilding with a sign that read "Bedrock Office" and went inside.
Robert was a rookie worker there, as he was only 26, and when he stepped inside, was face to face with his boss, Dan. Dan greeted him with "Because of your recent work you've been promoted to Senior worker."
Before as a rookie Robert got 10$ an hour, but now he got 20$ an hour. There were many products produced in Bedrock Office, Robert worked in the department of antivirus. He was an editor, so he made small tweaks to the design. It was an extremely large office building, with 200+ workers and many departments, which is why alot of people called it boring inc.
Matt Johnson woke up at 7:00 in his small bedroom. He had a coffee table, a bed, and a desk for homework with many drawers and his laptop ontop of his dresser. Matt went down to the kitchen, sat down on the wooden chair and poured himself some cereal. After breakfeast he went and washed his face. Matt was a medium sized 14 year old with shaggy black hair and blue eyes wearing a black hoodie with ripped jeans. Matt grabbed his Science homework (they had to do an explanation on what foods affect cows), yelled "See ya mom!" and set off through the door. He grabbed his bright blue skateboard, went down the bumpy pavement down to the highschool. On his way he remembered in a flash it was a career day and report card day! Matt popped his skateboard, put it in his bag and went inside.
First period was history. They talked about the first minecraft colonies and the inventor of mushroom stew.
Right after science the loudspeaker said "Matt Johnson" and he went down to the principals office for career day.
He was greeted by his science teacher, Mr. Collins who slided out Matt's report card.
Matt looked at it and saw his grades. History- B+, Social Studies- B, Math- A-, English B, and Science A+
"Well Mr. Johnson," started Mr. Collins "I recommend a mob bioligest because of your good overall cooperation, and a scientest because of your science and math grades. So think those over." The bell rang and Matt set off for Social Studies.
We're all just doing our best, to do what we think is right, in the world we believe in.
I completely agreed....
2 days after recieveing his promotion, Robert was working when he got a phone call. He picked up his small blue cell phone and saw it was his friend Sarah from the department of law enforcement. "Hey Rob, I have a court session tommorow at 12:00 but I cant make it. Can you fill in for me?"
"Sure."
"Thanks, I appreciate it."
Robert pressed the end button and got back to his work. At 5:30 he made himself some chicken, did more work and went to bed.
The next day Robert drank his coffee, kicked back and watched some TV. At 12:00 he got in his car, drove down 2 miles, turned right and parked.
The court was large with 2 sets of chairs for the watchers, 1 large stand for the jury and the tables. After every arrived the judge with short gray hair started
"What has Leroy Washington done?"
A short man said "He was dealing drugs."
"Leroy you may tell your side of the story."
"I was selling some drugs at my drug store to help cure sickness."
The short man's lawyer then said "But they were illegal and i have proof!"
"You see, this particular drug that was the special featured one says cure vomiting instantly, but when you peel the label off, it says Macia which is an illeagal energy boosting drug that causes hallucinations."
"I... you..." Leroy stammered.
"The jury may now decide who is correct."
After 5 minutes of talking the jury was finished.
"In a 11-0 vote the jury believes he WAS selling illegal drugs." Robert said.
The cops rushed Leroy off to jail but one returned and declared "Leroy has been sentenced to 5 years."
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Leroy Washington woke up on his first day in prison. According to his striped hat he was Prisoner 362. He sat around in his lonely cell when at 10:30 the cell doors opened and a loudspeaker said "Prisoner 362 please report to the main office."
Leroy walked down past the medium security cells, past a guard with a bat cracking his knuckles, and into the main office. A tall, young man wearing a blue police uniform started "Here in the prison you can get off early if you do some service. We have a mine that you will dig into. Leave the minerals if you find any! The police will collect them after every day. The mine is located in a wall of the prison. If you plan to escape, think again. We've set up electric gates all the way down to bedrock around the mine. Now get moving!"
Leroy grabbed a pickaxe, and went down the hall to the mine.
The mine was extremely large. There were twisting, different level corridors with prisoners everywhere breaking away stone. Leroy went down a small hallway and broke away the stone on his right. All that he found was another hall. He tried his left next. Nothing so he kept digging that way. He was digging and saw something dark. He cleared away some dust and found some coal. Not a huge find, but it was his first. He started digging a clear area to be a mining station. There he found more coal, and even a small oil pool. He picked up the oil in a bucket he was given. A person pushing a minecart came down and tossed Leroy a tunafish sandwhich. He ate it then dug some more. Eventually he had a 10x10 meter room. Another minecart came down and the man said "Any oil?" Leroy put in his oil bucket and went back to his cell. At about 10:00 the loudspeaker said "Thank you prisoners. Today we got 4 buckets of oil, 7 peices of coal and 2 iron peices. Everyone gets 5 days off their time. The man in the cell next to Leroy yelled "Yes! Only 2 days left for me to serve!"
John and James Deangelo woke up at 12:00 and went down to the suburban lab. John and James were 25 year old twins. They both had black hair and wore white labcoats. The only way you could tell them apart (besides their nametags) were James had lighter hair and was slightly taller. Their eyes were stormy gray. When they arrived in their black car, they saw their assistant Sally pull in. She stepped out with (to their suprise) her son Matt. "Matt this is John and James, John and James this is Matt."
"Sup" Said Matt.
Matt bumped fists with James and High Fived John.
"James is a scientest and John is a mob biologist." Sally informed Matt.
James led Matt to something that looked like 4 robotlike hands with a U at the end facing one spot. "This is a lava reactor. It still has bugs to work out so we use water for now." James said. He flipped a switch, typed in a code on a keypad and some water in the middle of the hands started bending pointlessly. John led them into a room marked John's Mob Study, "These guys are great. They work for the national goverment."
John opened the door and they stepped into a small room with covered windows and a wooden door on the left and a metal one on the right. First John motioned them into the door on the right. There were many test tubes, files and lots of studying instruments. Matt went over to the test tubes and saw 5 beakers labeled.
They had code apparently because there were only 1-5 and X+O. "And now what you've all been waiting for..." Started John catching Matt off guard "The test room!" He announced opening the wooden door.
What Matt first saw was breathtaking. There was straw everywhere, the sound of rushing water and grassy pens. By every pen there was a sign and some studying equipment. Matt went over to the wolf pen and it was grooming its fur. He went over to the studying equipent. There was a microscope and a beaker labeled Wolf Fur.
Matt wandered around there for about an hour when he had to go home. He asked his mom how she helps and she said "I help out with the studying. I make most of the small improvements while John and James make the large ones.
There are just too many characters for me to keep up with!
There are small introductions, but not too much detail in the chapters.
I'm sorry if I seem a bit harsh, but I really think this series could end up going very well!