You call that competition?
I call that garbage in a trash yard!
I find this extremely funny, because this is the fourth time someone that got denied, is making their own post apocalyptic server. It will fall apart like the other three did! >:smile.gif:
I'd like to make another of my comments. Another laugh at those who describe a character like so:
Does your character have any special skills?: Not really...
ASIDE FROM BEING IMMORTAl
ASIDE FROM BEING ABLE TO PUNCH THROUGH WALLS
ASIDE FROM BEING A SUPER INTELLIGENT ROBOT
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Does your character have any special skills?: Not really...
ASIDE FROM BEING IMMORTAL
ASIDE FROM BEING ABLE TO PUNCH THROUGH WALLS
ASIDE FROM BEING A SUPER INTELLIGENT ROBOT
-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Not really bad, I could make some spelling or grammar mistakes, but I could say what I try to say
-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I'm kinda friendly and helpfull.
-How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 4-5 hours in a day.
-How long have you played minecraft?: Since Indev I think.
-What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: I was roleplaying mostly in games such as Fallout or other Roleplaying games. I was doing it since 3-4 years ago.
-What do you expect this server will be like?: Pure Survival
-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I played on some Towny servers, but they weren't fun, so I left them
-Have you ever been banned before? if, why? ( Be Honest ): I was banned for once for something that my friend done to pull me a prank.
-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: I agree on all of the rules, also readed lore 1-2 times.
-What is a slime called on this server?: [Unknown]
-How did you hear about us?: From Minecraft forums
-Will you be willing to download and be active on our Mumble server?: I will.
In-Character:
-Character Name: Nierro Shifterr
-Biography: I was born in 2188.I don't know anything about place I born.My family was traders which was kinda wealthy.My brother learned how to fight from my brother and I learned how to be a doctor from books that I found in the wasteland.Later, when I became 13, my family joined to a Faction.Faction was called Dawn Brigade.
In Faction, I befriended with another person who knew something about being a doctor, North Eden. He was in nearly same age as I was. He thought me about being a doctor and surviving through wastes.He was kind also had reflexes of a tiger and eyes of an eagle. He could hit a crow that is 200m away easily with a bow.
In a battle against another faction, me and North were chosen to be medics in the battle. We aided the soldiers and get them medical help during fight. My brother was also fough in the front lines in that battle. But when enemies destroyed the line that White was worked, they killed him brutally.
When battle ended I learned killed 60 enemy soldier by the bomb he got on him, which he attached to himself at the start of the battle.That moment, I felt myself miserable. I did not much to aid my comrades. Even my brother played a key role in victory.
After White's death, I felt lonely and lonely. Everyone was amazed how I beared the stress of a battle. But, well it wasn't making me any better. And In every major battle, It made me fell worse.
Faction was growing bigger and bigger every single day.But in time, our Faction gained new enemies.Our leader was getting old, so a new leader was needed. Most of the people appointed my brother, who were a really good fighter also really smart.
In time our parents became older and older.In May 2212 they died on a trade mission. So our old Leader ordered me and my brother to retrieve our parent's corpses. Also he thinked that it was a challenge to prove that my brother is ready to become leader.
During the mission, we entered a cave. Cave was dark so we didn't know where we was going. I heard something so I unsheated my sword but a strange bug attacked us from behind. When I looked behind, bug throw a liquid on my eyes, I became blind that way. Then my brother attacked the bug and killed it.
So we eventually found what we were looking for and returned. But on our way, somekind of earthquake happened, and when we came back, all our faction was destroyed. So we continued to find where we belonged, in the wastes. Until that incident (The Painfull event part)
-Character Family: Only Brother.
-Character Age: 36
-Character Appearance: All body covered with bandages, wears a hood.Because of an unknown reason, his eyes became red.
-Character Personality: (Any fatal flaws?): Calm and quick. Kills anyone whitout hesitation who calls him a freak or such.
-Occupation: Not really a doctor. More likely half scavenger, half-Doctor
-Can your character read or write?: both
-Can your character mine?: Not much, he could mine stones, coals and Irons.But can't go any further than that.Reason for that is he scared to die. He could die by falling from a underground cliff, or falling into lava.
-Can your character build? (Holes in the ground do not count.): Yes, he could build a little house or a big base.He loves building things. He sees building things as a nature gift.
-Can your character fight?: Yes.Thanks to his brother's body, He could easily fight a raider or a mutant.
-Can your character farm?: No.
-Does your character have any special skills?:Good as a doctor and a fighter
-Does your character have any mental or physical disabilities? Any health problems?: No
-Character Fears:Fears death really much.
-DESCRIBE an event where your character is in deep pain: (No *I dodge the raiders arrows*. Write it out.)
I was walking with my brother for miles and hours. It's been awhile since we saw this big sandstorm. Then my brother shouted and said there was somekind of 'gate' . I thought It was a Vault, It was. My brother said that we should enter. When we entered, I heard some strange noises but I didn't it was something serious. Suddenly, something attacked me out of nowhere. It seemed like a mutant who was attacked me. My brother quickly attacked the mutant adn killed him. But there were more mutants that's coming. My ribcage was crushed by first attack. I was hardly breathing. Suddenly a mutant attacked with its claw. Last thing I saw was that my brother sacrificing himself. His blood scattered over everywhere. Then he killed the last mutant. Finally, his body hit the ground. Quickly, I took my brother half-dead body with me with my last strength, searching for medical equipment. Then I found a room which had strange eqiupment in it. I put my brother in a strange cabin named 'Fusioner'. Then I entered the other cabin without knowing it. Suddenly, I felt a pain that no like other. I screamed like crazy but I can't heard a think. Then after some minutes, when I got out of cabin, I felt that my brother's and my bosy was somehow 'fused'! His body and mine, his strength and mine, and his intelligence was one. And his pain too. I could finally see. But my body was 'stranger' than before, so I covered it with alot of bandages. Then I screamed for a time. Tears dropped from my face, feelling the pain of the operation, I felt numb, and hit the floor, unconscionus.
-A screenshot of your skin: (Please include a picture of the skin being worn, and a png of the skin itself.)
-Other Information: Please don't keep your attention at my spelling or grammar mistakes, english not is my mother language ^^
I will use ((*)) or brackets to speak in OOC in the local chat if needed or I will get banned
Considering your place of origin, and that english isn't your first language, I think it would be fair to simply judge off of content, and not grammar, unless it's major.
Review:
Your app is sort of... strange, the background is long, but not exactly detailed enough, and it seemed like I was watching a movie, not really reading a biography, the bio needs to be about your character's life, all throughout it, not just during one part. You need to cover his childhood, his teen years, and all the way up to his current age (36) The bio started out like a bio should, with an intro to the character, his family as a kid, and you even informed us of a faction that you joined. Only problem is that you never told us WHY your family joined the Dawn Brigade. After the first paragraph, it turns into more of a "Current Event" movie than an actual biography. Another big part of the application is the detailing of why you can or can't do certain tasks. You need to add at least a paragraph per detail, except for the age. Also, your EDP (Event in Deep Pain) doesn't really belong there, it should be in the Bio. Fusing you and your brother's bodies isn't really an EDP, it's more of the end of your bio instead. Make a new EDP up, one that involves emotional pain for your character, something he hates to think about. Hope this helps. Overall: 5/10 Judgement: Unfortunently, DENIED
PS: You said something about a skin missing?
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There was even going to be a party for you. A big party. That all your friends were invited too. I invited your best friend the companion cube. Of course, he couldn't come because you murdered him. All your other friends couldn't come either, because you don't have any other friends. Because of how unlikeable you are. It says so right here in your personal file: UNLIKEABLE, liked by no one, a bitter, unlikeable loner, who's passing shall not be mourned, SHALL NOT BE MOURNED. That's exactly what it says. Very formal. Very official. It also says you were adopted, so thats funny too.
You call that competition?
I call that garbage in a trash yard!
I find this extremely funny, because this is the fourth time someone that got denied, is making their own post apocalyptic server. It will fall apart like the other three did! >:smile.gif:
I think I just spat out my tea while laughing.
Beat you too it, I died of laughter :smile.gif:
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There was even going to be a party for you. A big party. That all your friends were invited too. I invited your best friend the companion cube. Of course, he couldn't come because you murdered him. All your other friends couldn't come either, because you don't have any other friends. Because of how unlikeable you are. It says so right here in your personal file: UNLIKEABLE, liked by no one, a bitter, unlikeable loner, who's passing shall not be mourned, SHALL NOT BE MOURNED. That's exactly what it says. Very formal. Very official. It also says you were adopted, so thats funny too.
Since you're dead Penguin, can I have your Snivy's knife?
You have to fight him for it (He's level 101 with Super Level 2 Billion Saiyan Power... and a shiv) YOU GOT NO CHANCE
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There was even going to be a party for you. A big party. That all your friends were invited too. I invited your best friend the companion cube. Of course, he couldn't come because you murdered him. All your other friends couldn't come either, because you don't have any other friends. Because of how unlikeable you are. It says so right here in your personal file: UNLIKEABLE, liked by no one, a bitter, unlikeable loner, who's passing shall not be mourned, SHALL NOT BE MOURNED. That's exactly what it says. Very formal. Very official. It also says you were adopted, so thats funny too.
Can I have my application looked over? Or at the least have it completely blown off? Or given criticism to? It's about two pages back. 148.
I'll get right to it!
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There was even going to be a party for you. A big party. That all your friends were invited too. I invited your best friend the companion cube. Of course, he couldn't come because you murdered him. All your other friends couldn't come either, because you don't have any other friends. Because of how unlikeable you are. It says so right here in your personal file: UNLIKEABLE, liked by no one, a bitter, unlikeable loner, who's passing shall not be mourned, SHALL NOT BE MOURNED. That's exactly what it says. Very formal. Very official. It also says you were adopted, so thats funny too.
You have to fight him for it (He's level 101 with Super Level 2 Billion Saiyan Power... and a shiv) YOU GOT NO CHANCE
Unless I use... Mudkipz! Who coincidentally is carrying an RPG. Justin Bieber
I just automatically won..
Rebecca Black.
Charlie Sheen
You can't win now!
By the way, listen to this. It's awesome, and I've been listening to it almost all day. For some reason I have the urge to murder people.
Chill! Chill!
Go and kill some Xigs! That will make your urge disappear it a blunk!
Trust me i have tried it!
-Time-Zone/Country of Residence: I live in the good ol' US, and my timezone is pacific standard time.
-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Quite, although I tend to forget things easily, so I can misremember how to spell things I don't use often, and my typing is really sloppy, so I typo often.
-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: A very mature person, and quite an adult already. But with the heart of a child.
-How much time could you be on the server weekly?: Hm...It fluctuates, but I'll try my best to be on often.
-How long have you played minecraft?: About a year. I'm sort of in between being a veteran and a new guy to the game.
-What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: I know plenty, such as to respect a roleplayer, never force them into things, and to launch an attack, not do it outright. I've been doing it for many years, and the main kind I've been doing is dialogue based, with not that much focus on actions. Like the kind you'd do in minecraft, actually.
-What do you expect this server will be like?: Extremely high-brow, full of mature people, and nice and fun.
-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: Any servers I left, I did it out of boredom, or something else. I
-Have you ever been banned before? if, why? ( Be Honest ) : Only a creative server, for greifing, and all I did there was mis-click.
-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: I agree, and accept, and understand. Although I find it funny that the lore starts at 2011.
-What is a slime called on this server?: It doesn't have a name, it's a cube of toxic sludge.
-How did you hear about us?: On the list of servers that supported the texture pack.
-Will you be willing to download and be active on our Mumble server?: Eeh...I might, if it doesn't lag my minecraft too bad. But don't expect me to speak. It's beyond my comfort zone.
In-Character:
-Character Name: Jason. Just Jason.
-Biography: "Push, Jessica! Push! The doctor says there's another coming!" Those would be the words from the posh man's mouth, were he not about to vomit from the sight. So disgusting. Instead, the doctor tended to the pregnant mother, who was spouting off curses she herself swore she would never say. The first baby was squeezed out, a beautiful little girl, and the second, a chubby...Not so beautiful boy. They were twins.
Fast forward five years, and they were both given their PIA's. "What's this?" The little girl asked. As per usual, the boy, now skinnier, repeated the question, but in a more vulgar manner. "Yeah, the **** is this ****." His father slapped him. "Jason J. Jaman, you watch your language!" The father then turned to his darling little girl. "It's called a Personal Item Assistance device. You can call it P.I.A., for short." The girl smiled. "I'm going to go show this to my friends!" She skipped off, while the boy stayed still, peering at the device attached to his arm. "Why the f-" His father glared. "Sorry, Dad- Er, Jacob." His father always insisted to be called by name. As if it mattered to Jason. But he wasn't brave enough to not say sorry. Yet. "Why weren't we given these things at birth? They would be useful then." He was hit by his father. "Be quiet, and don't question your elders." Jason ran off, crying, to his best and only friend. An old and vulgar man, called George. "My...My daddy..." the boy could barely speak in between sobs. "There, there," George patted him on the back. "Your dad's a ****ing idiot, anyways. What does he know. Oh, and I almost forgot! I have a present for you." Jason stopped crying, and looked hopeful. George chuckled, and handed him a gas mask. "Happy birthday." Jason puzzled over the device. "It's too big!" He exclaimed, with a muffled voice, as he had tried to slip on the mask. "It's for when you're older."
Another five years, and two major events happen. George dies, and Jason steals a crafting bench. Due to his best friend dying, Jason dislikes talking about this part of his life. He pretends it doesn't happen.
Fast forward ten years.
Jason stands at the gate to his town, now destroyed. Only he survived.
He puts his mask on, he never wants anyone to see him cry.
Once he leaves the town, he goes back to his rebellious self.
-Character Family: Sister: Jamie J. Jaman. A well behaved little girl. She never did anything wrong. Jason's opinion: She's a brainwashed idiot. Father: James J. Jaman. He hit Jason constantly, only in private, however. Everywhere else, he exuded an air of class. Mother: Jessica H. Jaman. She took the last name of her husband when married, but her middle initial wasn't a j. Damn. Her personality was great, and she was a beautiful woman. She was loved by all in the town. Literally. She was a cheating *****. James divorced her after he found out his children weren't his. She kept the last name.
-Character Age: 20
-Character Appearance: Buzz cut, wearing jeans, a sash, with a gold button. He also fashioned shoulder plates out of scrap metal, but he frequently removes them for better armor. His jeans are torn, and somehow he hasn't gotten an infection from the wound there. He wears a red shirt, and a gas mask, but it's old and frequently breaks, leaking in radiation. He only wears it so nobody can see him cry, should it ever happen again.
-Character Personality: (Any fatal flaws?): He's cold and uncaring, even to his friends. He's also vulgar, and most likely will never find friends to be uncaring to.
-Occupation: Trader.
-Can your character read or write?: Yes, both.
-Can your character mine?: Nope.
-Can your character build? (Holes in the ground do not count.): He can cobble together little tents. That's about it.
-Can your character fight?: Barely.
-Can your character farm?: No.
-Does your character have any special skills?: He can make drugs, on a budget. George taught him how.
-Does your character have any mental or physical disabilities? Any health problems?: He freezes up whenever he thinks about his past.
-Character Fears: Slimes, and radiation in general.
-DESCRIBE an event where your character is in deep pain: (No *I dodge the raiders arrows*. Write it out.) Jason was sitting, making some drugs for some clients, when an addict broke in, and shot Jason in the arm. He fell back, cursing, and squirming. He slowly pulled out the firearm arrow lodged in his arm, while the addict ran off, giggling with glee, holding Jason's drugs. He cursed again.
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-Other Information: Please excuse my crappy writing, and the lack of it. I tried my best, should it not be adequate, please give me critique. I can improve that way. Oh, also: I will use ((*)) or brackets to speak in OOC in the local chat if needed or I will get banned!
I told you i'd review it!
Review:
This isn't the best app i've seen, but it does have some good parts. Lets start with the bio, it starts out kind of like Fallout 3, with the giving birth thing (no points taken off for that, but please be a little more original) After the birth it "Fast Forwards" five years, you say they were given their PIAs, then Jason says "Yeah, the **** is this ****" I understand it's a ravaged planet, but I don't know of (or ever even heard of) any five year olds that were this mature. It just doesn't feel at all real. It seems like a 20 year old in a 5 year old's body. I did like that you went into a small birthday story thing (also from Fallout 3) and at least told us when he got his gas mask. However, it then fast forwards again. This is the major issue here, you fast forward through a total of 15 years of his life, yet he's only 20. And you also don't give any background on why the town was destroyed, you simply say that he was the only survivor. The EDP is also kind of odd... it's not really even an EDP, it's just a small raid that was committed on his drugs. You also never tell us why he makes drugs, or when he was taught. And theres the need to add more detail as to why he can and can't do things, such as mine or farm. You need at least a paragraph in every singe detail of the app. With the exception of age. I do like though that you added your character's family and his opinions on them, I haven't seen much of that. Overall: 5/10 Judgement:DENIED
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There was even going to be a party for you. A big party. That all your friends were invited too. I invited your best friend the companion cube. Of course, he couldn't come because you murdered him. All your other friends couldn't come either, because you don't have any other friends. Because of how unlikeable you are. It says so right here in your personal file: UNLIKEABLE, liked by no one, a bitter, unlikeable loner, who's passing shall not be mourned, SHALL NOT BE MOURNED. That's exactly what it says. Very formal. Very official. It also says you were adopted, so thats funny too.
Penguin, could you look my app over? If it's not good enough, could you let me know how to improve on it? Thanks.
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"Words start and stop wars; create and destroy relationships; encourage and shatter dreams; calm and excite emotions; free and enslave minds." -L. Hall
Since you're dead Penguin, can I have your Snivy's knife?
You have to fight him for it (He's level 101 with Super Level 2 Billion Saiyan Power... and a shiv) YOU GOT NO CHANCE
Unless I use... Mudkipz! Who coincidentally is carrying an RPG.
This is all over my shiv... lawl.
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There was even going to be a party for you. A big party. That all your friends were invited too. I invited your best friend the companion cube. Of course, he couldn't come because you murdered him. All your other friends couldn't come either, because you don't have any other friends. Because of how unlikeable you are. It says so right here in your personal file: UNLIKEABLE, liked by no one, a bitter, unlikeable loner, who's passing shall not be mourned, SHALL NOT BE MOURNED. That's exactly what it says. Very formal. Very official. It also says you were adopted, so thats funny too.
You call that competition?
I call that garbage in a trash yard!
I find this extremely funny, because this is the fourth time someone that got denied, is making their own post apocalyptic server. It will fall apart like the other three did! >:smile.gif:
Sigging this.
Considering your place of origin, and that english isn't your first language, I think it would be fair to simply judge off of content, and not grammar, unless it's major.
Review:
Your app is sort of... strange, the background is long, but not exactly detailed enough, and it seemed like I was watching a movie, not really reading a biography, the bio needs to be about your character's life, all throughout it, not just during one part. You need to cover his childhood, his teen years, and all the way up to his current age (36) The bio started out like a bio should, with an intro to the character, his family as a kid, and you even informed us of a faction that you joined. Only problem is that you never told us WHY your family joined the Dawn Brigade. After the first paragraph, it turns into more of a "Current Event" movie than an actual biography. Another big part of the application is the detailing of why you can or can't do certain tasks. You need to add at least a paragraph per detail, except for the age. Also, your EDP (Event in Deep Pain) doesn't really belong there, it should be in the Bio. Fusing you and your brother's bodies isn't really an EDP, it's more of the end of your bio instead. Make a new EDP up, one that involves emotional pain for your character, something he hates to think about. Hope this helps.
Overall: 5/10
Judgement: Unfortunently, DENIED
PS: You said something about a skin missing?
Beat you too it, I died of laughter :smile.gif:
You have to fight him for it (He's level 101 with Super Level 2 Billion Saiyan Power... and a shiv) YOU GOT NO CHANCE
I'll get right to it!
Unless I use... Mudkipz! Who coincidentally is carrying an RPG.
Justin Bieber
I just automatically won..
Rebecca Black.
Charlie Sheen
You can't win now!
Chill! Chill!
Go and kill some Xigs! That will make your urge disappear it a blunk!
Trust me i have tried it!
I told you i'd review it!
Review:
This isn't the best app i've seen, but it does have some good parts. Lets start with the bio, it starts out kind of like Fallout 3, with the giving birth thing (no points taken off for that, but please be a little more original) After the birth it "Fast Forwards" five years, you say they were given their PIAs, then Jason says "Yeah, the **** is this ****" I understand it's a ravaged planet, but I don't know of (or ever even heard of) any five year olds that were this mature. It just doesn't feel at all real. It seems like a 20 year old in a 5 year old's body. I did like that you went into a small birthday story thing (also from Fallout 3) and at least told us when he got his gas mask. However, it then fast forwards again. This is the major issue here, you fast forward through a total of 15 years of his life, yet he's only 20. And you also don't give any background on why the town was destroyed, you simply say that he was the only survivor. The EDP is also kind of odd... it's not really even an EDP, it's just a small raid that was committed on his drugs. You also never tell us why he makes drugs, or when he was taught. And theres the need to add more detail as to why he can and can't do things, such as mine or farm. You need at least a paragraph in every singe detail of the app. With the exception of age. I do like though that you added your character's family and his opinions on them, I haven't seen much of that.
Overall: 5/10
Judgement: DENIED
This is all over my shiv... lawl.
Which one? The person or the drug?
Charlie Sheen is the drug!
Read this while listening to this v