A Corny as all hell story in the world of minecraft, a version of it where hundreds of years of past and it has evolved in to it's own world, no longer under are control, I really don't know where I'm going with it yet other then to just be odd and perhaps start a chain of other stories written by people with a lot more skill then me XD
I'm coining the word Blochs, Block+Notch people =P
I am so bored if I even am trying this x.x;;
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Chapter 1: Prelude
I'm Jach, I'm what you could call a Bloch, the speices of block shaped people that inhabit the many worlds of this place we have learned to call Minecraft... I have heard the stories, thought they were just meant to scare the little kids, heck, most people did. The stories I'm talking about? Well, there are stories of people... they were called "Griefers"...
Controlled by unknown forces, they would go from world to world in the time when they were called servers. Back in the days when you just willed yourself to a new world instead of having to use a transit pillar to get there. These Griefers, monster's they were, would destroy whole worlds that they collected in... leaving places flooded with water, lava, or just ruining every creation in site...
World destroying was not the only thing they did, sometimes they would destroy the block below someone, causing them to fall. Some historians who believe in the Griefers say back then they could only destroy blocks, becuase back then heights and drowning were not dangers to are ancestors. Even if that was the case the stories tell of the time when are ancestors began to be able to be hurt, they killed thousands, destroyed worlds by the hundreds... but it was all stories right? If only I knew the truth a week ago...
My story starts with me and my family going to the Interserver Spleef Federation, to a server that was one huge Spleef arena, one of the 7 Bloch wonders even! I was rooting for the Ruthless Reds, though they were losing at the time to the Yelling Yellows, when everything went dark... For a single second everything seemed inverted, but suddenly when it turned to normal as fast as it blacked out and everyone looked around confused it began. Odd Blochs, all in the same skins started to appear and they stood there for a few seconds before... they started to destroy blocks all around them at insane speeds, one of them was even able to create blocks and started to create a tower of sand underneath him! How he did this with out first collecting the sane like the rest of us normal Blochs had to do I have never been able to find out... Though that was nothing, he created Water A block that even the best of Bloch Scientists had taken years to create and at high costs. The water didn't even act like normal water, no, instead it started to spread and grow like some /thing/ people started to run screaming away from the odd tan Bloch people and the evergrowing water, but it was to late.
The Greifers soon started to spread though they only pulled that spreading water trick out twice before for some reason stopping it. They continued to do this for 2 days while my family escaped to a pillar to escape... I found myself alone after that in an untamed wild world where plenty of blockbeasts roomed around... I guess I will start with what I did there.
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Other chapters will be about twice to trice as long as this, I've been very bored recently (Haven't got a new video game in over a year! and can't buy minecraft yet so I can't make skins and such x.x) I normally don't write stories, never have unless I had to for school or something, so any criticism is welcome, also, laugh all you want, I'm laughing at my self right now! =D might try to make the story funny or something.
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<TrueWolves> That's what I meant Iguana, I'm like an Extra+, to just fill in tiny cracks... right?
<Iguana> YUS. <Iguana> BUT WE NEED YOU
<Iguana> You are like...Billy Mays Mighty Putty. (trademarked)
IRC quote on the Minecraft Machinima
Some constructive criticism:
Proofread your work a little bit - clean up those spelling and grammar issues. It's easier to become immersed in a story when you can't spot any technical errors. Got some marathon runners among your sentences, too. Semi-colon is your friend.
Try to tone down your use of the ellipsis. Restrict it to dialogue sections - bringing me to my next suggestion; convert this narrative piece into a third-person story. I think it would work better with your "look into the distant past" motif.
It sometimes helps to use names of people on the forums (i love stories like that :biggrin.gif: it helps some people connect with the story and want to keep reading)
I sure wish i could be in this story, yes I do! I would be Mo, who lives in a small hut,
NOW MAKE SOME MORE CHAPTAZ
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"Master Cheif! What did I tell you about humping posts?!"
My Steam ID Is: jjchrizzles
o.O no it did not die, rather, I have had no time what so ever to continue it (I did not even expect to do so the next day when I got sleep XD)
I will take anyone's ideas for characters and even servers, hell, I'll try to update this 1-2 time's a week when my real life settles the hell down.
I did not expect people to like it, and even more so that I get bugged at least once every other day by someone RANDOM to continue it =D
[email protected] (email me to my 6 year old email I made when I was little, lol, with the Title "Minecraft Story" so I can find it in my spam box, and what character and server (I hope I can visit it) or creation you want me to throw in the story, if I can, I probably will try.)
Expect an update in... 1-4 days, I have map requests and skin requests and real life stuff to fill out first.
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<TrueWolves> That's what I meant Iguana, I'm like an Extra+, to just fill in tiny cracks... right?
<Iguana> YUS. <Iguana> BUT WE NEED YOU
<Iguana> You are like...Billy Mays Mighty Putty. (trademarked)
IRC quote on the Minecraft Machinima
Citricsquid vandalized this space. It has been sterilized ever since.
"Master Cheif! What did I tell you about humping posts?!"
My Steam ID Is: jjchrizzles
I hope it's not dead. It sounds like a amazing concept and it seems to be done very well. Keep working on this and get it made into a book! Also, I would like to be in it to.
Just contact me on IRC if you want a single player or multiplayer thing you biult to be in it, or if you want to be in it, that way I can write you in properly =/
Allright, I'm starting the 2nd chapter which I will fill in this post via Edit when I finish it, I don't know how the crap I wrote the first time was so popular, but I'm going to accualy try on this (watch it end up like crap for me trying, eh? =D)
EDIT: I started it, which means I'll finish it, but I got to sleep. -.-
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<TrueWolves> That's what I meant Iguana, I'm like an Extra+, to just fill in tiny cracks... right?
<Iguana> YUS. <Iguana> BUT WE NEED YOU
<Iguana> You are like...Billy Mays Mighty Putty. (trademarked)
IRC quote on the Minecraft Machinima
Just contact me on IRC if you want a single player or multiplayer thing you biult to be in it, or if you want to be in it, that way I can write you in properly =/
Allright, I'm starting the 2nd chapter which I will fill in this post via Edit when I finish it, I don't know how the crap I wrote the first time was so popular, but I'm going to accualy try on this (watch it end up like crap for me trying, eh? =D)
EDIT: I started it, which means I'll finish it, but I got to sleep. -.-
w00t! I really hope we use this for the Minecraft Machinima. Some more characters would be nice for the Machinima version :biggrin.gif:! I look foreward to reading this!
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This text is just here to take up space. Congratulations. You found it!-Zachariasmith
I'm coining the word Blochs, Block+Notch people =P
I am so bored if I even am trying this x.x;;
~~~~~~~~~~
Chapter 1: Prelude
I'm Jach, I'm what you could call a Bloch, the speices of block shaped people that inhabit the many worlds of this place we have learned to call Minecraft... I have heard the stories, thought they were just meant to scare the little kids, heck, most people did. The stories I'm talking about? Well, there are stories of people... they were called "Griefers"...
Controlled by unknown forces, they would go from world to world in the time when they were called servers. Back in the days when you just willed yourself to a new world instead of having to use a transit pillar to get there. These Griefers, monster's they were, would destroy whole worlds that they collected in... leaving places flooded with water, lava, or just ruining every creation in site...
World destroying was not the only thing they did, sometimes they would destroy the block below someone, causing them to fall. Some historians who believe in the Griefers say back then they could only destroy blocks, becuase back then heights and drowning were not dangers to are ancestors. Even if that was the case the stories tell of the time when are ancestors began to be able to be hurt, they killed thousands, destroyed worlds by the hundreds... but it was all stories right? If only I knew the truth a week ago...
My story starts with me and my family going to the Interserver Spleef Federation, to a server that was one huge Spleef arena, one of the 7 Bloch wonders even! I was rooting for the Ruthless Reds, though they were losing at the time to the Yelling Yellows, when everything went dark... For a single second everything seemed inverted, but suddenly when it turned to normal as fast as it blacked out and everyone looked around confused it began. Odd Blochs, all in the same skins started to appear and they stood there for a few seconds before... they started to destroy blocks all around them at insane speeds, one of them was even able to create blocks and started to create a tower of sand underneath him! How he did this with out first collecting the sane like the rest of us normal Blochs had to do I have never been able to find out... Though that was nothing, he created Water A block that even the best of Bloch Scientists had taken years to create and at high costs. The water didn't even act like normal water, no, instead it started to spread and grow like some /thing/ people started to run screaming away from the odd tan Bloch people and the evergrowing water, but it was to late.
The Greifers soon started to spread though they only pulled that spreading water trick out twice before for some reason stopping it. They continued to do this for 2 days while my family escaped to a pillar to escape... I found myself alone after that in an untamed wild world where plenty of blockbeasts roomed around... I guess I will start with what I did there.
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Other chapters will be about twice to trice as long as this, I've been very bored recently (Haven't got a new video game in over a year! and can't buy minecraft yet so I can't make skins and such x.x) I normally don't write stories, never have unless I had to for school or something, so any criticism is welcome, also, laugh all you want, I'm laughing at my self right now! =D might try to make the story funny or something.
<Iguana> YUS. <Iguana> BUT WE NEED YOU
<Iguana> You are like...Billy Mays Mighty Putty. (trademarked)
IRC quote on the Minecraft Machinima
Some constructive criticism:
Proofread your work a little bit - clean up those spelling and grammar issues. It's easier to become immersed in a story when you can't spot any technical errors. Got some marathon runners among your sentences, too. Semi-colon is your friend.
Try to tone down your use of the ellipsis. Restrict it to dialogue sections - bringing me to my next suggestion; convert this narrative piece into a third-person story. I think it would work better with your "look into the distant past" motif.
Keep it up!
Relic of a bygone age.
My name is Alex. I have a normal skin, but the shirt is orange and I have glasses.:biggrin.gif:
NOW MAKE SOME MORE CHAPTAZ
Citricsquid vandalized this space. It has been sterilized ever since.
"Master Cheif! What did I tell you about humping posts?!"
My Steam ID Is: jjchrizzles
Please, keep adding chapters, I'd love to see how this plays out.
I will take anyone's ideas for characters and even servers, hell, I'll try to update this 1-2 time's a week when my real life settles the hell down.
I did not expect people to like it, and even more so that I get bugged at least once every other day by someone RANDOM to continue it =D
[email protected] (email me to my 6 year old email I made when I was little, lol, with the Title "Minecraft Story" so I can find it in my spam box, and what character and server (I hope I can visit it) or creation you want me to throw in the story, if I can, I probably will try.)
Expect an update in... 1-4 days, I have map requests and skin requests and real life stuff to fill out first.
<Iguana> YUS. <Iguana> BUT WE NEED YOU
<Iguana> You are like...Billy Mays Mighty Putty. (trademarked)
IRC quote on the Minecraft Machinima
Citricsquid vandalized this space. It has been sterilized ever since.
"Master Cheif! What did I tell you about humping posts?!"
My Steam ID Is: jjchrizzles
**feels a bit nervous...**
Allright, I'm starting the 2nd chapter which I will fill in this post via Edit when I finish it, I don't know how the crap I wrote the first time was so popular, but I'm going to accualy try on this (watch it end up like crap for me trying, eh? =D)
EDIT: I started it, which means I'll finish it, but I got to sleep. -.-
<Iguana> YUS. <Iguana> BUT WE NEED YOU
<Iguana> You are like...Billy Mays Mighty Putty. (trademarked)
IRC quote on the Minecraft Machinima
w00t! I really hope we use this for the Minecraft Machinima. Some more characters would be nice for the Machinima version :biggrin.gif:! I look foreward to reading this!