Role-Play Exp.: I have played TONS of servers, (RP) buxville, the lands of aswein, super earth and more
Why Us:I'm amazed to have found a war server, (with guns) it's gotta be epic, im shure it is,
and im looking for a now server to play on.
Time You Can Dedicate:i can play almost all day, [AEST] yes, about 3-7 hrs on this server a day.
IC
Name: Rambo
Gender: Male
Age: 22
RP Example:
Commander: "Okay men, get out there and fight for our country!"
Soldiers: "YES SIR"
Commander: "Good, NOW GET OUT THERE!"
Soldier1: "Rambo, i have a tactic, just stay low and snipe them." *BANG*
Soldier2 (Rambo): "NOO JORDAN! COME BACK! NOOOOOO! WHY! *sobs*
Soldier2 (Rambo): *Rambo sets out, he snipes from behind trees and takes out 5 men
before being shot in the leg* "ARGH!" *Rambo falls down.**paralyzed from the intense pain,
Rambo prays:* "Jordan, i fought my best, but i have failed..." "i should've done better. *sobs*"
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs): Rambo grew up with his mum, his dad, and his
younger brother.
he was among the more quiet of people, but as he went into his adolescence,
he became more aggressive and ran away from his family. He never saw his family
again.
he survived on berries from bushes and slept in a cave, during the night fashioning himself
tools, he used these to make a short blade in witch he used to kill pigs and cows for their meat. he eventually made a pickaxe and dug down, not realizing that he had no ladders....
he realized this only a short while after, and tried to dig a slope upwards, but he found his self in the lands of Fallout, where war never changes...
IGN: Buddy1006
Age: 13
Role-Play Exp.: N/e (Unless you count a small classic server I was in a few months ago.)
Why Us: Because I deeply enjoy the Fallout universe's creatures and enemies (Like the deathclaws, which I hope do not exist in this server!!!), the vast amounts of factions, and the compelling story lines I have engaged in Fallout: 3 and Fallout: New Vegas (I do admit, the story to New Vegas had a lot more choices faction wise, but Fallout: 3 had more side quests and the Explorer perk didn't kill me in Fallout:3 unlike New Vegas.). Also, I like the idea and the plug-ins used would make the combat better then just bows and swords, and the high octane battles to follow from multiple factions facing off against each other
Time You Can Dedicate: 3:00 pm to 10:00 pm on week days.
IC
Name: Cain Seti
Gender: Male
Age: 18
RP Example: Cain comes upon a wounded Enclave soldier. He asks, "What happened to you?". The soldier replies, "I was cut by a few raiders and fell in irradiated water.". Cain Swiftly realizes that this man may be no longer pure radiation-wise, but then he thinks of something... "What is your division?" he says. The soldier says, "Tesla.". Cain thinks about what the outcome may be if he is brought back to base. But then he swiftly says, "Lets get to base, soldier.". Sometimes purity doesn't matter. (Worse comes to worse, (Cain thinks) I'll kill him, but for now hes a brother in arms and he will be spared.)
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs): After being kicked out of a unnamed vault for trying to overthrow the overseer because he saw a few flaws with the way things were run (Noneffective workers, stupidity in the reactor, and a few other tidbits that would end up in the vault exploding.), he came upon another vault looking structure and approached it, he was ambushed by a few soldiers wearing powered armor (what he called the soldiers was weirdo Mr. Handy(s)) he rushed one of them, knocked him over by grabbing his legs and thrusting forward (The clumsy Soldier was later quoted saying, "Do you know how hard it is to get up when you are wearing that armor?!") and grabbed his lazer pistol and proceeded to shoot the other 2 soldiers, he was in a small gunfight for approximately 38 minutes and 23 seconds when he was knocked out by a crafty shoulder shooting a boulder on the cliff above him and instead of the effect the soldier was expecting, a few rocks fell down and hit him on the head. Cain later awoke in a room with a enclave Officer saying he showed combat prowess and a blood test showed he had (little to) no radiation in his system, and if he would like to join the Enclave. And so with the other option of being killed on the spot, he joined the Enclave and went through training with little to no problems. Later Cain was heard saying that he " LOVES THIS JOB!". He is currently in the tesla division, and is waiting further orders on how to make the Enclave gain strength.
In-Character name: Cain Seti
In-game-character-age: 18
Special talents?: Engineer and a apparent lover of energy weapons.
Why the Enclave?: (No I likz poW3r ArMorZ LOLTROLLOLOL) I always wanted to fight for the enclave in Fallout: 3 to see how the plot would turn out, and I wondered what the faces on the piles of bodies that lay behind me would look, as if maybe I would have killed different factions and worked with different people. I also like the idea of (possibly) organized attack strategies and army-like battalions, and the perks seemed to fit me a little bit. Also, the power armored are a added bonus :tongue.gif: .
What Branch do you want to be in?: (there are the Scientists, Soldiers, officers, Telsa, and of course the famed 166th Telsa divison.) (Normal) Tesla
Will you remain loyal to the Enclave?: Yes.
Do you agree to never disobey officers?: Yes.
Also, if I may say something, I think the server should have Raiders as a faction.
You did the rp example wrong, you have to have * or - before and after every sentence. Other than that its great.
Role-Play Exp.: I have played TONS of servers, (RP) buxville, the lands of aswein, super earth and more
Why Us:I'm amazed to have found a war server, (with guns) it's gotta be epic, im shure it is,
and im looking for a now server to play on.
Time You Can Dedicate:i can play almost all day, [AEST] yes, about 3-7 hrs on this server a day.
IC
Name: Rambo
Gender: Male
Age: 22
RP Example:
Commander: "Okay men, get out there and fight for our country!"
Soldiers: "YES SIR"
Commander: "Good, NOW GET OUT THERE!"
Soldier1: "Rambo, i have a tactic, just stay low and snipe them." *BANG*
Soldier2 (Rambo): "NOO JORDAN! COME BACK! NOOOOOO! WHY! *sobs*
Soldier2 (Rambo): *Rambo sets out, he snipes from behind trees and takes out 5 men
before being shot in the leg* "ARGH!" *Rambo falls down.**paralyzed from the intense pain,
Rambo prays:* "Jordan, i fought my best, but i have failed..." "i should've done better. *sobs*"
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs): Rambo grew up with his mum, his dad, and his
younger brother.
he was among the more quiet of people, but as he went into his adolescence,
he became more aggressive and ran away from his family. He never saw his family
again.
he survived on berries from bushes and slept in a cave, during the night fashioning himself
tools, he used these to make a short blade in witch he used to kill pigs and cows for their meat. he eventually made a pickaxe and dug down, not realizing that he had no ladders....
he realized this only a short while after, and tried to dig a slope upwards, but he found his self in the lands of Fallout, where war never changes...
Okay i doubt this will get accepted. The backstory is too short. The name itself and how your referencing him is not right for fallout. You said you came here because its a war server, which it is not a war rp server. Its a post apoctalyptic rp server taking place in the fallout universe.
IGN: Bourne223
Age: 17, turning 18 This January the 19th
Role-Play Exp.: Minecraft Middle Earth experience, RP serverin bf2, i've been Table-Top RPing D&D for about a year now + other tabletops, my friend is creating one and we're beta testing it...scenario based Airsofting...drama club...and now we're getting abstract XD
Why Us: I was actually not searching for a server to join, but i stumbled upon this thread. so i thought i might as well give it a shot seeing as i don't have anymore good RP chances lately. However i'm also a fan of the Fallout universe. Like many people my age, i'm really attracted to themes of Post-Apocalyptia, and i really enjoy RPGs in general.
Time You Can Dedicate: Well i'll be honest. i have a lot of commitments. i have AP courses (Lit and Calc B/C), Tennis, Robotics club, I'm one of the 2 ASB Tech Coordinators, and i have a girlfriend. However the time that i have leftover (about an hour a day, more on the weekends) i normally play minecraft. basically i can devote 9 hours a week to your server.
IC
Name: Kal
Gender: Male
Age: 42
RP Example:
*The moon rises, broken, over the top of the Hill as the stranger hides in the bushes*
Man 1: That man back there was du-umb!
Man 2: Yeah! "P-p-please sir, i'm so thirsty!" - BAM - we sure got 'im
Man 1: The Rusty Can's gonna be hoppin' tonight-and these caps a'int gonna spend themselves!
Man 2: You sure said it. Hey i gotta take a leak, stand guard.
Man 1: okay, but don't take too long. more than 3 shakes . . . ; ]
*As the second man goes into the bushes, he hears a rustle of leaves*
Man 2:(whispering) Hello? anyone there?
*Thunk*
...
Man 1: Hey? you comin' back?
Stranger: I don't think he will be.
*[Click, click-click] The slide of the 10mm pistol is the only sound heard as the stranger takes out his second and last victim, pocketing the caps for himself...*
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs):
Kal was a tinkerer back in the vaults. ever since he was 7 he was always tinkering around with what little electronics were available to him, or sneaking into the engineering levels to gaze, dumbfounded at the vast machines which kept the Vault alive.
After his entry into man-hood, Kal decided to leave the vault behind, and escape into the wastes to see the real world, and make great inventions. He wandered around from town to town, always having the miraculous luck of being the sole survivor of raider attacks, or being gone junk-hunting at just the right time as mortar strikes and artillery destroyed his latest village. However Kal is no stranger to fighting. His many years on his own in the Apocalyptic Chaos that is earth have taught him well, and he stands today as a formidable foe, if you ever have the misfortune to have to anger him.
Cmon you put 1.5 paragraphs. About 1 if you followed the directions of it saying long. You can definitly expand this. Other then that the app is great.
Okay i doubt this will get accepted. The backstory is too short. The name itself and how your referencing him is not right for fallout. You said you came here because its a war server, which it is not a war rp server. Its a post apoctalyptic rp server taking place in the fallout universe.
IGN:scout24
Age:15
Role-Play Exp.:umm i played alot of rp and dont know what to think of umm oh yeah i was playing in a huge city it lag on on me and got disconnected :sad.gif:
Why Us:well this server looks cool
Time You Can Dedicate:most of the day i think unless my brother kicks me off
IC
Name:Angel
Gender:Male
Age:15
RP Example:dose Lord of the craft count?
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs):Life on the desert was hard some did not go to the vault like me scout.desert life was hard in tell the NCR came.They where taking random kids like me. They made us do work we cant even do.When every kid turned 18 we where forced to join the NCR killing gekos was the fun part but the deathclaws well lets just say some of us didnt come back.
A few years later war was spreading every where.All citys where gaurded by NCR. 24/7 none stop blood from my friends every where it was like a Bloodbath.So i grabed my rifle and well you see the point...
Why The NCR well i played fallout for a long time and NCR look awesome i hope you make NCR skins
Will You Respect Your Fellow Officers and Soldiers: yes im not rode
Will You Fight Until The End:Yes even if we get bombed i will still fight
See you in the Mojave, Everest out.
Im gonna give you a list of what you did wrong and you can choose to improve. But im not sure they'll accept you with this.
Go into more details in the "Why us" please.
Your spelling and grammar is a little faulty.
For the rp example theyre asking for you to give example of rp situations not what rps youve done. Example:*Seth shoots a mutants and runs towards a hill* Mutant 2: Hey get back here!
Seth: No way! *Mutant throws a nail board knocking seth out*
The NCR arent that wide spread. Please Re-Read the lore.
Replace desert with wasteland.
Your reasons for joining the NCR arent all that convinicing.
OOC
IGN: Stoppsy97
Age: 15
Role-play EXP: I've played a couple RP servers
Why us?: Fallout is my favorite game. Second is Minecraft and together with awesome
RP and what seems a friendly staff, how can I refuse?
Time you can dedicate?: as much as possible
IC
Name: Adam Deralis
Age: 31
RP example: Adam looked around the decimated former town. It was hit hard last night
by a raiding party. "Mabye I should scavenge for goods." he said. Out of the corner of his
eye, he saw movement. Adam slung his rifle of his shoulder and took aim. It was a radroach,
but he shot it anyway. 'Atleast I can get some caps out of this' he thought. After collecting the
remains, Adam trudged carefully into the ruins of the still smoldering ruins of the town.
Backstory: Adam once lived with his family, surviving of what little they could find, Until
Raiders came and killed his parents. Adam was enslaved with others and was sold to a friendly
Wastelander who was actually trying to free slaves. At the age of 19, Adam started a caravan company until
feral ghouls attacked and killed his Brahmin, left Adam to die and let greedy Wasters pillage his stuff. He
Woke up days later, within a Brotherhood Outpost. He remained there until he was healed. He never forgot them.
Till this very day, Adam still lives out in the wastes.
Brotherhood of Steel Application
IC
Name(full): Adam Deralis
Rank you want if wanted: Knight
Talents: capable of fighting at close range and long range, melee and gun.
Why do you want to join the Brotherhood of Steel?: The Brotherhood saved my life. It's the least I can do to help.
Will you be dedicated?: They saved me so, Of course I will.
Will you be loyal and respectful to your fellow soldiers?: To anyone of a surperior rank than me.
OOC
IGN: Stoppsy97
Age: 15
Role-play EXP: I've played a couple RP servers
Why us?: Fallout is my favorite game. Second is Minecraft and together with awesome
RP and what seems a friendly staff, how can I refuse?
Time you can dedicate?: as much as possible
IC
Name: Adam Deralis
Age: 31
RP example: Adam looked around the decimated former town. It was hit hard last night
by a raiding party. "Mabye I should scavenge for goods." he said. Out of the corner of his
eye, he saw movement. Adam slung his rifle of his shoulder and took aim. It was a radroach,
but he shot it anyway. 'Atleast I can get some caps out of this' he thought. After collecting the
remains, Adam trudged carefully into the ruins of the still smoldering ruins of the town.
Backstory: Adam once lived with his family, surviving of what little they could find, Until
Raiders came and killed his parents. Adam was enslaved with others and was sold to a friendly
Wastelander who was actually trying to free slaves. At the age of 19, Adam started a caravan company until
feral ghouls attacked and killed his Brahmin, left Adam to die and let greedy Wasters pillage his stuff. He
Woke up days later, within a Brotherhood Outpost. He remained there until he was healed. He never forgot them.
Till this very day, Adam still lives out in the wastes.
Brotherhood of Steel Application
IC
Name(full): Adam Deralis
Rank you want if wanted: Knight
Talents: capable of fighting at close range and long range, melee and gun.
Why do you want to join the Brotherhood of Steel?: The Brotherhood saved my life. It's the least I can do to help.
Will you be dedicated?: They saved me so, Of course I will.
Will you be loyal and respectful to your fellow soldiers?: To anyone of a surperior rank than me.
If i were you i would make the backstory more detailed like this"To this very day,Adam still lives out in the wastes were every day is a war and you never know what will happen".Also by "will you be loyal and respectful to your fellow soldiers" he means "will you not go crazy and kill every lower class soldiers?" fix those mistakes and you will be fine
If i were you i would make the backstory more detailed like this"To this very day,Adam still lives out in the wastes were every day is a war and you never know what will happen".Also by "will you be loyal and respectful to your fellow soldiers" he means "will you not go crazy and kill every lower class soldiers?" fix those mistakes and you will be fine
IGN:stormlord88
Age:17
Role-Play Exp.:the wastelands
Why Us: u guys r very dedicated and it seemes ths will be a very cool server
Time You Can Dedicate: alot
IC
Name:Jett
Gender:Male
Age:27
RP Example:No one has ever been by my side,I dont need you; I can survive alone.Now be gone with ye and dont come back again, and if you do, this bullet will be in yer head YA HEAR ME!
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs): And there I was, the air was stiff the night was cold I could see blood driping down my side. My side was aching unbearably and i couldnt move. I was sprawled on the ground during a war and atlast i blacked out. If Your wondering how i got in that situation well your in luck ill tell it to you. I woke up just like a normal day. My wife was making me some breakfast and then it hapened. We heard an explosion in the distance, it kept getting closer, and closer, and. BOOM . They took my wife as she lie there dead with our house half torn apart I sauhgt revenge. Everything I had was now gone because of them. And if your curious who theyare, well ill tell ya, The Rebels. They were the meanest, roughest, toughest, raiders of them all. I signed up for the republic to fight against the rebels, I had nothing to loose. I was a very good fighter skilled with the sword my general put me up as one of the front line-men. this war , the final war would decide it the rebels VS the republic.
This could put a stop to them..... or us. When I woke up from my black out I was in the hospital and the general came to me and said to me we won. And then tasting victory the general ranked me up to lutenent. I faught in many wars and I was unstoppable. my legend grew on. "Jett the defeater of the Rebels."
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Ummm I have a question I posted my app a couple of pages back and you told me I had to the back story and I did that but I haven gotten a reply since I also submitted a enclave app as well and that wasn't replied to ether so I was just wondering is I was accepted or not
your app was denied if you look a pager or 2 back it said who got accepted I would probably either look back and see if you missed something or make corrections to your app like better rp examples and add to back story, OK.
IGN:stormlord88
Age:17
Role-Play Exp.:the wastelands
Why Us: u guys r very dedicated and it seemes ths will be a very cool server
Time You Can Dedicate: alot
IC
Name:Jett
Gender:Male
Age:27
RP Example:No one has ever been by my side,I dont need you; I can survive alone.Now be gone with ye and dont come back again, and if you do, this bullet will be in yer head YA HEAR ME!
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs): And there I was, the air was stiff the night was cold I could see blood driping down my side. My side was aching unbearably and i couldnt move. I was sprawled on the ground during a war and atlast i blacked out. If Your wondering how i got in that situation well your in luck ill tell it to you. I woke up just like a normal day. My wife was making me some breakfast and then it hapened. We heard an explosion in the distance, it kept getting closer, and closer, and. BOOM . They took my wife as she lie there dead with our house half torn apart I sauhgt revenge. Everything I had was now gone because of them. And if your curious who theyare, well ill tell ya, The Rebels. They were the meanest, roughest, toughest, raiders of them all. I signed up for the republic to fight against the rebels, I had nothing to loose. I was a very good fighter skilled with the sword my general put me up as one of the front line-men. this war , the final war would decide it the rebels VS the republic.
This could put a stop to them..... or us. When I woke up from my black out I was in the hospital and the general came to me and said to me we won. And then tasting victory the general ranked me up to lutenent. I faught in many wars and I was unstoppable. my legend grew on. "Jett the defeater of the Rebels."
Just to help you out before the admins see it fix rp example and maybe a tad bit more to the backstory.
IGN:44576
Age:15
Role-Play Exp.: I have played TONS of servers, (RP) buxville, the lands of aswein, super earth and more
Why Us:I'm amazed to have found a war server, (with guns) it's gotta be epic, im shure it is,
and im looking for a now server to play on.
Time You Can Dedicate:i can play almost all day, [AEST] yes, about 3-7 hrs on this server a day.
IC
Name: Rambo
Gender: Male
Age: 22
RP Example:
Commander: "Okay men, get out there and fight for our country!"
Soldiers: "YES SIR"
Commander: "Good, NOW GET OUT THERE!"
Soldier1: "Rambo, i have a tactic, just stay low and snipe them." *BANG*
Soldier2 (Rambo): "NOO JORDAN! COME BACK! NOOOOOO! WHY! *sobs*
Soldier2 (Rambo): *Rambo sets out, he snipes from behind trees and takes out 5 men
before being shot in the leg* "ARGH!" *Rambo falls down.**paralyzed from the intense pain,
Rambo prays:* "Jordan, i fought my best, but i have failed..." "i should've done better. *sobs*"
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs): Rambo grew up with his mum, his dad, and his
younger brother.
he was among the more quiet of people, but as he went into his adolescence,
he became more aggressive and ran away from his family. He never saw his family
again.
he survived on berries from bushes and slept in a cave, during the night fashioning himself
tools, he used these to make a short blade in witch he used to kill pigs and cows for their meat. he eventually made a pickaxe and dug down, not realizing that he had no ladders....
he realized this only a short while after, and tried to dig a slope upwards, but he found his self in the lands of Fallout, where war never changes...
You did the rp example wrong, you have to have * or - before and after every sentence. Other than that its great.
Okay i doubt this will get accepted. The backstory is too short. The name itself and how your referencing him is not right for fallout. You said you came here because its a war server, which it is not a war rp server. Its a post apoctalyptic rp server taking place in the fallout universe.
Cmon you put 1.5 paragraphs. About 1 if you followed the directions of it saying long. You can definitly expand this. Other then that the app is great.
:angry.gif:
Im gonna give you a list of what you did wrong and you can choose to improve. But im not sure they'll accept you with this.
Go into more details in the "Why us" please.
Your spelling and grammar is a little faulty.
For the rp example theyre asking for you to give example of rp situations not what rps youve done. Example:*Seth shoots a mutants and runs towards a hill* Mutant 2: Hey get back here!
Seth: No way! *Mutant throws a nail board knocking seth out*
The NCR arent that wide spread. Please Re-Read the lore.
Replace desert with wasteland.
Your reasons for joining the NCR arent all that convinicing.
Rambo just improve on it. Then you would be able to get accepted. Its no big deal.
IGN: Stoppsy97
Age: 15
Role-play EXP: I've played a couple RP servers
Why us?: Fallout is my favorite game. Second is Minecraft and together with awesome
RP and what seems a friendly staff, how can I refuse?
Time you can dedicate?: as much as possible
IC
Name: Adam Deralis
Age: 31
RP example: Adam looked around the decimated former town. It was hit hard last night
by a raiding party. "Mabye I should scavenge for goods." he said. Out of the corner of his
eye, he saw movement. Adam slung his rifle of his shoulder and took aim. It was a radroach,
but he shot it anyway. 'Atleast I can get some caps out of this' he thought. After collecting the
remains, Adam trudged carefully into the ruins of the still smoldering ruins of the town.
Backstory: Adam once lived with his family, surviving of what little they could find, Until
Raiders came and killed his parents. Adam was enslaved with others and was sold to a friendly
Wastelander who was actually trying to free slaves. At the age of 19, Adam started a caravan company until
feral ghouls attacked and killed his Brahmin, left Adam to die and let greedy Wasters pillage his stuff. He
Woke up days later, within a Brotherhood Outpost. He remained there until he was healed. He never forgot them.
Till this very day, Adam still lives out in the wastes.
Brotherhood of Steel Application
IC
Name(full): Adam Deralis
Rank you want if wanted: Knight
Talents: capable of fighting at close range and long range, melee and gun.
Why do you want to join the Brotherhood of Steel?: The Brotherhood saved my life. It's the least I can do to help.
Will you be dedicated?: They saved me so, Of course I will.
Will you be loyal and respectful to your fellow soldiers?: To anyone of a surperior rank than me.
Same here,
If i were you i would make the backstory more detailed like this"To this very day,Adam still lives out in the wastes were every day is a war and you never know what will happen".Also by "will you be loyal and respectful to your fellow soldiers" he means "will you not go crazy and kill every lower class soldiers?" fix those mistakes and you will be fine
ITS A DRAGON
Dangit you got to the app before me.
be hold the power of being bored on a cloudy sunday!
ITS A DRAGON
It would be a good idea increases your chances of it getting looked at,also make sure you add your corrections.
Age:17
Role-Play Exp.:the wastelands
Why Us: u guys r very dedicated and it seemes ths will be a very cool server
Time You Can Dedicate: alot
IC
Name:Jett
Gender:Male
Age:27
RP Example:No one has ever been by my side,I dont need you; I can survive alone.Now be gone with ye and dont come back again, and if you do, this bullet will be in yer head YA HEAR ME!
Backstory (1-2 LONG paragraphs): And there I was, the air was stiff the night was cold I could see blood driping down my side. My side was aching unbearably and i couldnt move. I was sprawled on the ground during a war and atlast i blacked out. If Your wondering how i got in that situation well your in luck ill tell it to you. I woke up just like a normal day. My wife was making me some breakfast and then it hapened. We heard an explosion in the distance, it kept getting closer, and closer, and. BOOM . They took my wife as she lie there dead with our house half torn apart I sauhgt revenge. Everything I had was now gone because of them. And if your curious who theyare, well ill tell ya, The Rebels. They were the meanest, roughest, toughest, raiders of them all. I signed up for the republic to fight against the rebels, I had nothing to loose. I was a very good fighter skilled with the sword my general put me up as one of the front line-men. this war , the final war would decide it the rebels VS the republic.
This could put a stop to them..... or us. When I woke up from my black out I was in the hospital and the general came to me and said to me we won. And then tasting victory the general ranked me up to lutenent. I faught in many wars and I was unstoppable. my legend grew on. "Jett the defeater of the Rebels."
your app was denied if you look a pager or 2 back it said who got accepted I would probably either look back and see if you missed something or make corrections to your app like better rp examples and add to back story, OK.
Just to help you out before the admins see it fix rp example and maybe a tad bit more to the backstory.